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  • Pretty good

    Its informative but next time add a bibliography.
    • 23/05/2006
    • 19:10:28
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Well written but next time add a bibliography
    • 23/05/2006
    • 19:01:16
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Add a bibliography next time

    Like the title of the comment says ....
    • 23/05/2006
    • 18:58:02
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Japan

    I'm thinking you might be from Australia doing a subject called society and culture but hey I might be wrong. Anyway this is a good attempt. But what about japans open and closed door policy on trade? Commodore perry's letter from US president Fillmore to Japan in regards to trade or the fact that Japan believed in cultural superiority and this affected trade? I think there is a great essay writter in you with a little more research. Nice try tho =)
    • 23/05/2006
    • 18:53:26
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Globalisation

    You don't seem confident in things you raise and you use alot of general terms such as, "we all remember", "Most analysis"...etc you could improve this essay by using confident statements such as, "it is apparent", It is evident that", "Analysis of___states..." otherwise its pretty good. Next time add a bibliography tho=)
    • 23/05/2006
    • 18:39:04
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Law

    This essay is ok. With a lil bit more work this could be a great essay. You don't really have a strong introduction or conclusion. Introduction-state what the essay is going to look at. Body- look at it. Conclusion-state again what has been looked at.You could strengthen your essay buy using specific examples. I feel that you didn't really answer this question: Evaluate the effectiveness of Aboriginal Customary Law compared with Australian law in regards to punishment and ownership. You say that both are effective but you don't go into the pros and cons of either or conclude each arguement with an opinion. Like I said it could be good with a lil more work. Nice try tho =)
    • 23/05/2006
    • 18:31:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Alot of info

    There's alot of info here this must have taken a lot of time and work. Next time add a bibliography.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:59:33
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    This is interesting but next time add a bibliography..I'm a bit confused why this is in creative writing?
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:57:11
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Well written, keep it up.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:54:27
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Well researched

    I think alot of work went into this well done. Next time add a bibliography =)
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:53:21
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Blacktears

    'Ive read a few of your things today and I like ur writing style keep it up.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:49:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • =)

    Alot of work has gone into this. Next time add a bibliography=)
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:48:22
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I like it

    I like this essay, it's well written but next time add a bibliography. Cheers.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:47:08
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    I think this is well written and well researched good job.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:45:15
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Very informative

    You must have put alot of work into this its very informative.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:41:58
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Homosexuality

    Blacktears I think this is well written, informative and has good grammar. Well done. Though it's always helpful to add a bibliography. The issues u raised are interesting though you didn't conclude your parents' views which would have been interesting considering you mentioned they are both serving.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 19:33:15
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Pretty good

    Its pretty good, next time add a bibliography.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 08:29:13
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Nicely done

    I like ur style...next time including a bibliography.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 08:19:36
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I agree

    Coming from Australia and having the great barrier reef...people need to be educated. Well written.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 20:24:27
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay

    Alot of work went into this..well written.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 20:17:12
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • In your opinipn

    Your opinion is very interesting I dont know if I would totally agree...especially one seeing the portrait with my own eyes and thinking 'her' emtions change the more you look at it and two science is constantly evolving so maybe next week some other percentage of emotion will be detected...but all in all it was an interesting read.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 20:15:41
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • You raise good points

    You raise some good points andIi agree with you that parents need to be more responsible for young children. Alot of parents aren't educated or have been brought up eating the junk food they are feeding their kids. Junk food is easy and cheap to access...alot of the time older ppl need to change their ways before you can start working on kids.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 20:10:34
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • =)

    Well written..others will find this useful.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 20:04:22
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Its not worth it

    After reading this it makes u realise steriods are just not worth it...well done! p.s next time add a bibliography =)
    • 06/05/2006
    • 22:16:39
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    It's informative. Nicely done.
    • 06/05/2006
    • 22:11:03
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    Nicely done..it's a good essay. Keep it up.
    • 06/05/2006
    • 22:05:35
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Well written, its a good essay.
    • 06/05/2006
    • 22:03:59
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • What where you on as you wrote this?

    For creative writing it is definetly creative...I find it hard that you got 78% for this without your teacher sending you to rehab.
    • 06/05/2006
    • 22:00:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • It's honest so I like it

    This poem is interesting and can be used to see how even kids can be 'addicts'. It's not written in stanzas but if you rework the poem now it could be really good. Try using more symbolism next time it would make for a better read. But for a fourteen year old nice work....
    • 02/05/2006
    • 18:43:23
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • This is college material?

    It's confusing that you haven't put a bibliography so we know what article you are talking about?
    • 02/05/2006
    • 18:30:04
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • General but informative

    Your book review makes me want to go out and read the book and you have given me enough information about the book to be curious but not know what happens in the story which is good. Your spelling and grammar isn't to good but overall I like your review and I think others could find it helpful.
    • 02/05/2006
    • 18:27:07
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs more

    Firstly needs a bibliography and secondly you have raised alot of ideas but not given examples. This could be well written if you expanded on your ideas.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 07:25:51
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • West vancouver

    Well written...maybe you could send this in to your local newspaper?
    • 28/04/2006
    • 07:14:33
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Well written=)
    • 28/04/2006
    • 07:01:47
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Add a bibliography

    Add a bibliography next time =)
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:52:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    Informative but a bibliography is needed. Don't worry this is like the 5th essay I've had to remind today.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:48:07
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Well written. Good job, though a bibliography is needed.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:45:02
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Add a bibliography

    Informative but a bibliograpghy is needed and the bible verse is out of context? Next time use a modern translation.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:41:25
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Timeline rip off

    It's informative but just sounds like you have done a cut and paste job from a bad timeline.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:33:25
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Relationships?!

    The story was good but spelling and grammar could have been better. Also the change of heart at the end wasn't explained as well as it could have been. All in all it was a good story.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:28:46
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Really Interesting

    I think this is really well written. It pulls the reader in. I was keen to read on. Nicely done.
    • 28/04/2006
    • 06:16:18
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • General...

    This is very general and not informative. The main concepts such as eightfold path are not explained. There is also no bibliography.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 21:19:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Informative

    Informative however the spelling and punctuation isn't to good.
    • 24/04/2006
    • 21:08:10
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    This is interesting for creative writing and would be a good essay if ideas where expanded, cited etc. It's a good honest opinion =)
    • 24/04/2006
    • 20:49:02
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    Nicely written...you should read 'changing the world through effective youth ministry' by Ken Moser
    • 24/04/2006
    • 20:35:01
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Its good but the speeling sucks

    i wouldn't copy this essay but it has good points for furthering ideas.
    • 20/03/2003
    • 01:02:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Jildo

    i worte this essay and since i subitted it it got marked. i received 19/20 but i dont know how to change it on this site. please help
    • 02/02/2003
    • 00:35:01
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.