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  • Poor Essay

    In my opinion, this is a really poor essay. The information is scarce, and you pretty much mentioned only 3 points, yet there's countless differences in the movie. Also, you forgot to list 'which' Romeo and Juliet movie, although I know that it is Zefferelli's version, there are other Romeo and Juliet movies too.
    • 02/02/2010
    • 19:08:25
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  • Why is the title 'Hitler'?

    Is there any way to change the title of an essay? Because I think you accidently mixed up the title with another essay.
    • 02/02/2010
    • 19:05:58
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  • Category Error?

    I really don't see how this has anything to do with Romeo and Juliet, yet the subject seems to say so. Even though this essay focuses on love, it doesn't mention Romeo and Juliet.
    • 02/02/2010
    • 19:04:35
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  • Too Short

    Your essay doesn't explain much, or if it does, I don't understand it very well. And yes, I find the "shakespeare language" awkward when used in the modern version of Romeo + Juliet.
    • 27/01/2010
    • 19:13:28
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  • Structure

    For most interviews, there's an introduction question (i.e. "What is your name?") and an ending (i.e. "Thanks for this interview, I (or we) really appreciate your time.)
    • 27/01/2010
    • 19:11:22
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  • Simple Vocabulary

    Try using a thesaurus and using a higher level of diction. The content itself is very good though.
    • 27/01/2010
    • 19:08:19
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  • Too Short

    Too short, not enough information, no references/quotations/excerpts from the novel. This is one of the rare essays done in present tense.Not enough diction (only 'children words') and you could put more effort into it.
    • 25/01/2010
    • 17:10:01
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  • A medium essay.

    I think that this is a medium levelled essay. Good structure and everything, but it's not powerful enough. Making it a bit longer with more info is my advice.
    • 25/01/2010
    • 17:07:43
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  • A very impressive essay.

    Best essay I've read so far that's less than 1000 words. Usually for the longer essays, I get bored and stop reading it. But good job. This is a really good essay for its length.
    • 25/01/2010
    • 16:45:33
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  • Very Confusing Words

    I'm in grade 10 English, and I'm quite literate, but I had a rather difficult time understanding your essay.It's a brilliant essay, with a very high level of diction (choice of words). But most people I know would understand what you're talking about.For a university, it is good, but for something like high school, I recommend using less 'big words'.
    • 25/01/2010
    • 16:37:50
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  • Comment

    Excellent content, but there are several grammar and puntuation errors if you look carefully.Example: "Juliet,when we first meet her, is..." There should be a space after the comma.Another example: "Being a woman in an aristocratic family s she...'' The 's' after family makes no sense.
    • 24/01/2010
    • 19:59:32
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  • Too Long

    A very good essay, with lots of information. However, near the end, it was beginning to get tedious to read. You added excessive information, as if you were trying to tell the story in your essay at the same time. There's also some repetition in your essay, which also added to the length.
    • 13/12/2009
    • 11:07:49
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  • Comment

    Wow! I love your essay! If only more people would choose a topic like this...
    • 25/11/2009
    • 17:43:58
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  • To Kill a Mockingbird

    Okay essay, but still explains the theme very well.
    • 30/10/2009
    • 15:44:44
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  • Courage in "To Kill A Mockingbird"

    Very good essay. You clearly understand the book, although there are other themes as well.
    • 30/10/2009
    • 15:40:49
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  • Comment

    Good essay and good length.
    • 30/10/2009
    • 15:37:35
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  • Poor Piggy the Great

    Good essay for grade 11. If you want, you can add a few literary devices like metaphors to strengthen your essay.
    • 30/10/2009
    • 15:33:17
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  • A review of William Golding's "Lord of the Flies"

    Very good essay. I like it a lot. For a 3-page essay, it contains ample amount of information and states the point clearly. Well done.
    • 19/10/2009
    • 19:02:13
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  • Comments on your essay

    Good essay, however, it doesn't seem finished because there's no conclusion. You can improve the vocabulary of this essay by using a thesaurus is you want.You're missing a lot of the other symbols in the novel (actually, almost everything is a symbol, two pages wouldn't be nearly enough to explain them all. Even something like the dead pilot in chapter 6 is a symbol.)
    • 19/10/2009
    • 18:56:29
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  • Bad essay!

    This essay is very bad and is full of spelling and grammatical errors.The first sentence is a sentence fragment.The following words do not need to be capitalized in the second paragraph:-Impulsive-Controlling-OptimisticYou forgot to capitalize "piggy" at the end of the third paragraph. Remember, someone's name is a proper noun and therefore, should always be capitalized.In the third paragraph, there are also some errors:-"him self" should be "himself"-"along time" should be "a long time"-"12 year olds" should be "12-year-old's"This essay does not meet grade 10 criteria, and I don't believe that you got an A+ on it.
    • 18/10/2009
    • 19:07:06
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