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  • Great Essay

    Great essay on a subject that many people taking Art History courses will likely encounter. Very good!
    • 21/03/2004
    • 14:47:48
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice but a lot of Jargon

    It is good but has a lot of Jargon that is not easy to understand, however it is good writing for a 10th grader.
    • 21/03/2004
    • 14:36:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Reiterating

    Use paragraphs and try to format your bibliography
    • 21/03/2004
    • 14:34:32
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    But more substance is needed. I had to do a lot more for AP Art Histroy in HS for a SHORT ANSWER question. YOu might want to go indepth about the works and their styles and describe them.
    • 12/02/2004
    • 20:16:10
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • The words in the essay

    All of the words are mine. Why would you propose such a preposterous idea to even ponder that those words are not mine. I write my own stuff!
    • 08/02/2004
    • 22:57:05
    • Score: 4 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Dont speculate against my friend

    He didn't do it. I knew him at the time and saw Nicole a week before. After the last time I saw he, Nicole, and his kids who were my friends I never saw them again. But I was mistaken for one of his kids by a news helicopter whil I was at my friends house (His house is right next door to where O.J. lived. Well anyways it is all personal opinion. I dont think he did it but you do hoba. Well anyways the fact is that this is a great essay none-the-less and New Zealand fines for too many things!
    • 03/12/2003
    • 00:17:12
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay

    I think that is is okay but lacking and it does not seem very proffesional. Also it is confusing to me and does not seem to flow right. Your story is better suited for a comic strip.
    • 02/12/2003
    • 01:21:29
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • What do the footnotes do?

    I dont see anythign indicating what they are relating to. Besides that you have a really stron closing and an overall good essay.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 21:47:41
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Without the title

    this essay starts out of the blue. You might want to add an opening paragraph. Also in most cases you do not want to include a URL within the essay. Otherwise it is decent.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 21:45:01
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • One thing you forgot

    It is so true that they fine you for everything! My dad got fined 200 NZ ($100 US) for having a frickin apple in his briefcase! They are money hungry S.O.B.s they even had a credit card processing booth set up that is how often they fine!
    • 30/11/2003
    • 21:17:53
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Good points but some left out

    You made good points but you left out some other important points. The story is very complicated and you did a good job of getting as much symbolism as you could but I feel you could have put 2 or 3 more paragraphs more and still not be done.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 20:50:46
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    I didnt realize that it was possible. They seem to be too different. Next time you might want to compare and contrast lets say Edison and Lear the man who created the Learjet and the 8 track.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 20:40:04
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Grammar and syntax

    This essay has decent content but ouch! You need to make it into paragraphs use the enter key and just overall need better syntax and grammar. Did you copy this from another stie becuase this is what often happens when that is done.
    • 30/11/2003
    • 20:35:45
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.