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  • Like it....

    a really informative essay... you back up your points with good examples and analysis. what you could do, though, is using more transition words (eg. moreover, indeed, contrasting....) to make your paper flow a little more...
    • 28/02/2004
    • 12:57:42
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Sorry, but it's bad...

    i agree with the previous comment, that you could have used some research material to prove your facts. otherwise no one will buy what you offer them here... also, i dont only disagree with the content of your essay, but to be honest, i feel that your writing style might need some improvement. especially the thesis needs some editing. if you make your writing sound a little more sophisticated and come up with some numbers and stats, than it could actually be a decent paper (though i still disagree with its content) ...
    • 24/02/2004
    • 22:41:18
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • It's ok

    it's a good essay - at least the analysis is... your style, however, doesnt really do it for me, though...
    • 16/01/2004
    • 19:38:20
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Alter schwede... hut ab

    hab grad deinen aufsatz gelesen und bin beinah vom stuhl gefallen... der is ja mal hammer-gut... sehr beeindruckend!!! ich find vor allem deinen schreibstil extrem gut
    • 15/01/2004
    • 23:28:29
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • How could one do this

    i dont know how someone can make anyone do this kind of assignment for a shakespeare play - thats just wrong... but i still think you could have made more of it... macbeth is not as shallow as you have portrayed him. and what about his wife, couldnt you argue that it was all her fault... think about it
    • 15/01/2004
    • 23:21:59
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Slightly incoherent

    just a short comment: it's Immanuel Kant (pay attention to the I in Immanuel) and even more important: it is not carl but gottfried wilhelm leibniz...trust me, I know... little details can make a big difference...
    • 15/01/2004
    • 23:15:58
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • I dont know....

    i have read pride and prejudice, too and i am fascinated by j.austen's writing. i am not quite sure though what to think about your essay... it contains some errors (eg. jane is in fact the oldest of the daughters). but more important is that, in my opinion, you didnt really pick up on what she wanted to say in pride and prejudice... she is NOT talking about the importance of marrying someone wealthy... if you pay close attention to her style, you'll find how ironic and cynical she approaches her themes... just something to think about
    • 15/01/2004
    • 23:04:46
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    i dont know if it was intended but this paper is rather a biography than an essay, just because there is no thesis whatsoever. however, it gives a lot of interesting details. but maybe it would have been better if you explained the significance of those details more.also: the title of the second part is "hitler and WWII". i expected something like an analysis of his war actions (i.e. the reasons for what he did - or at least what he did...) but what do messerschmitts have to do with hitler as a person???oh, and by the way: you are talking about living space... the german word for that is not "Leibenstrawn" (that word doesnt even exist!!!) but "Lebensraum"... just so that you know the next time
    • 29/10/2003
    • 18:10:24
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Get a dictionary

    the text itself is pretty good. BUT there is one thing that makes me freak out: it is Auschwitz, NOT AUCHSCHWITZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!! there is no shame in not knowing how to spell these sometimes complicated names, but it is embarassing to just spell randomly spell it instead of looking it up
    • 25/10/2003
    • 17:51:58
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • You say that so easily

    it is obvious that you put a lot of effort in this paper, and i think you have some good facts to support your arguments. just two things though: first of all, if you would not repeat your main argument ("the holocaust could have been prevented but people were just too ignorant") in every single paragraph, the style might be better.besides, some things are just more complex than they seem. it is easy to say that they could have just assassinated hitler. its not that no one ever tried (july 1944, a bomb under his desk) or that no one cared at all. just the complexity of the situation might have been somewhat overwhelming to deal with...
    • 25/10/2003
    • 17:27:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    a really well written paper. particularly the fact, that you give arguments for both sides (even if the pro side receives more focus...)
    • 25/10/2003
    • 16:46:46
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Great

    i generally like this paper. your style is good and you get your point across pretty well. and just something to think about: in europe, the drinking age is 16 for beer and wine, 18 for averything else... and everything is still going fine... how would you explain that?!?
    • 17/10/2003
    • 15:44:57
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, but...

    i really find your paper well written, but to be honest, i am not completly satisfied with the way you present it. i agree that september 11 was wrong, but from your paper, i get the feeling that you actually think every single moslem hates the US - which is definitly NOT true. not only because one is living in an islamic country, he/she is automatically supporting a holy war... maybe you did not mean to say that, but unfortunatly, this is the point that the reader might find...
    • 17/10/2003
    • 15:25:04
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Very touching

    when i was reading your poem, my heart skipped a few beats. i have read other poems that you have submitted to cheathouse (which were all brilliant) but this one is by far the best. it is so touching, i had tears coming to my eyes when i was done reading it...
    • 15/10/2003
    • 12:06:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Are you serious about that?

    i dont know if you are actually serious about that entire toilet paper thing. anyways, i found it hilarious, i couldnt stop laughing. this essay doesnt really have a profound topic, but its just too funny to read... :)
    • 14/10/2003
    • 16:14:01
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Its grade apropriate

    considering that this is a grade nine paper, it is pretty decent. however, it is not really helpful for higher levels.
    • 14/10/2003
    • 16:08:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Some good points

    there are some good points in your essay. however, i think that the style could difnatly be improved, e.g. avoid repeating the same phrase again and again. and then, you probaly used "one" in order to avoid using "you". i just found that in this case, you did use too much of "one". just try to rephrase your sentences in a way that doesnt sound as if you were talking to someone.overall, considering that you wrote this paper in grade 10, it is actually pretty good
    • 06/10/2003
    • 18:43:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice paper

    your essay, i would say, is ok. you surely make some good points, however, the style might need some improvement. for instance try to not use "i" but rather stay in the 3rd person. if you use the first person, you deminish your ideas, which makes the paper weaker than it is in reality...
    • 06/10/2003
    • 11:56:47
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Amazing

    i loved this essay. and i totally agree with you. i dont want to make any judgements, but through my time spent in the us and canada (where i learned about american history) i made the same observations. not only in history classes but even on the daily tv show, the american super power and history is praised without spending only one second looking at the "dark part" of it. and again: i love this essay
    • 05/10/2003
    • 14:41:06
    • Score: 20 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
  • Great topic

    the theme (or motiv) of name is, as i find, really interesting. maybe thats why i had expected more from this essay than i actually found.
    • 05/10/2003
    • 14:33:58
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Sure it was 95???

    i found it okay, however not necessarily a 95. first of all, you do have to work on your sentence structure (missing verbs). and maybe its just me, but i couldnt really figure out the thesis in you intro (but i did in the conclusion). and another thought: you say that macbeth is not a victim of fate because his wife has no power over him. would you really consider his wife almighty? or do you just not know what fate is???
    • 05/10/2003
    • 14:28:55
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Make up your mind

    the great gatsby is probably one of the best books ever written. one reason being fitzgerald's ability to create amazing characters, such as nick carraway. in your essay however, you dont really get under the surface of the character. you cant even make up your mind whether he is reliable or not. in my opinion he is not (which i think can be proven). but your essay doesnt really prove or disprove anything...
    • 05/10/2003
    • 13:53:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Pretty good

    i think to wrote a fairely good, if a little opinionated paper. a little advice: if you reduced words like "kicked out" and did some touche ups on your grammar, it would be even better
    • 28/09/2003
    • 19:05:06
    • Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Its ok...

    as the previous comment already says, this is an average essay. Not only were many repetiotions use, but also are little details incorrect (e.g. the king decides to o to macbeth's castle, he is NOT invited). Besides, I feel that you have dealt only superficially with this great book. For example, lady Macbeth's death is worth stressing more because it shows the transformation macbeth has gone through.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 08:26:32
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • I think it's great

    I loved your essay!!! Since English is not my first language, I totally know what you are talking about because when I was learning English, I was so confused about everything you talked about in your essay... I really think it's great, but maybe if you explained a bit more instead of only questioning, one might actually learn something from it. Anyway, I really like it...
    • 12/07/2003
    • 09:16:39
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Can you prove that???

    i think you have some really good ideas in your essay. but maybe, if some of your points were proven through quotes or whatsoever, your essay would definitly be better. For example, the idea that one of the witches was the 3rd murderer is interesting, but you cant prove it at all. but other than that, i think it's a good essay...
    • 28/06/2003
    • 11:20:35
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Ok...

    well, not exactly what i would considere worthy to receive 100% but it could be worse... but it is pretty confusing how you arrange your footnotes. u might wanna work on that
    • 07/05/2003
    • 18:19:12
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Proud to be american?!?

    well, what would i say to such a paper??? as you said already, it really IS opinionated. maybe too much?!? i dont want to offend anyone (please dont take it as such), but this paper sounds to me like a really good example of propaganda. of course, it is your opinion as a (obviously proud) american but before judging other countries foreign policy, you should first of all ask for the reason why they act like they do. and second of all, you might wanna start questioning our own foreing policy. just because the news tell you it is right, doesnt mean it really is. think about it...
    • 07/05/2003
    • 18:14:07
    • Score: 19 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
  • Really informative

    i do think this essay is really informative about problems in pakistan. i maybe did go a little too much into the whole 'corrupt government' thing. Yes, the government is corrupt, but you should try (in order to keep yur essay formal and neutral) to not show your own opinion to much. besides, the form (with which i mean that whole a, b, c... thing) of your essay could be improved. and you might wanna make sure that the next time, you make some paragraphs instead of one long text... but overall, well done
    • 07/05/2003
    • 17:58:14
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Not bad...

    i was really impressed reading this paper... as a german, who lived in hamburg for a really long time, i think it is quite good. the only thing that really could be improved is the spelling and grammar. overall, not too bad...
    • 07/05/2003
    • 17:41:41
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • 96% ??? where would they come from?

    first of all, you make a big mistake right in the beginning: it is not the federal republik (west germany) who built the wall. it was the east!!! and this is a pretty important fact... the history about the cities is not too bad, but you could have paid more attention to the small details. concerning luther: he did not influence the german language as much as you are stressing in your paper. he is rather important for the developement of the protestant church... and dont tell me i would not no what i am talking about. believe me, i do. i am german...
    • 07/05/2003
    • 17:36:38
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Thats plagiarism

    first i thought you did a great job... til i did some research for my own essay on that topic. and i found out, that you more or less just pastet various texts from other sites together (like www.pbs.org/onewoman/suffrage.html). even though you didnt write that by yourself, you just got an 82 for it... isnt that disappointing?!? maybe the next time, you should hand in your own crap!!!
    • 19/04/2003
    • 23:49:08
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Overall well done

    the essay itself as an informativ piece of writing is really well. i, however, am missing some passion. i am an athlet myself and totally agree with your thesis. if you had put a bit more passion in this work, it might have been even better.
    • 10/04/2003
    • 22:32:52
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • ???

    what was the purpose of this text? am i right, when i assume that these are study notes and not written by someone with german as first language??? these notes are good for a brief glance at her charakter but they are not really detailed. spelling and grammar might need improvement (trust me, i am german)...
    • 10/04/2003
    • 21:37:00
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.