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  • Review plus Response to ccmustangs2001

    ccmustangs2001: You're being contradictory, not to mentioned dogmatic. You just said that it was good of her to state both sides of the argument, but then you stated that one was correct. Although I generally agree with the sentemints you expressed, stating them as a fact is dogmatic and frankly, rude to those who believe differently. You should express it as an opinion.Cheer12: This is much better than the first attempt. However, the fact that both the first attempt and this copy have a grade of 71% suggests that you didn't get that grade at all, if you even handed it in... which is highly unlikely since you posted the first copy no more than a day ago. I didn't want to think that you were only trying to get points and were misleading people, but the fact that you reviewed/praised your OWN paper made me dubious.
    • 06/10/2003
    • 18:46:26
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Expand.

    I think you could have said more about this theme. This seemed like a summary of the book, and if it hadn't said in the title that this was about the theme of Ambition and greed, I wouldn't have known that that was the topic.AMBEREEN: The essay is about the theme of ambition and greed, as it says from the title, so there was no reason for the author to consider other themes; that wasn't the topic.
    • 28/09/2003
    • 09:52:36
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Reply to allythegr8

    I disagree. I think it is better for a person not to vote than to vote irresponsibly, i.e. they know little to nothing about the candidates and therefore cannot make a decision based on who would be better for the position. In such cases, people are being more responsible by not voting.
    • 26/09/2003
    • 12:26:52
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Reply to courlove7

    Ah, yes, I thought I had mentioned in the title/description: This was written for the school newspaper. That's why it's written in that format. ^^
    • 25/09/2003
    • 14:17:44
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A few mistakes

    Your story of Metis is incorrect. (I think when you said Mytida, you meant Metis, the goddess of prudence.) She was the first wife of Zeus and mother of Athena. She was suppose to give birth to one child, not two. Gaia warned Zeus that IF the child was a son, that son would overthrow Zeus. That is why Zeus swallowed Metis. He never intended to give birth to the child himself. Also, it was not Prometheus who opened Zeus's skull, it was Hephaestus, and Zeus did not ask him to just because it was time for Athena to be born; Metis began to hammer a helmet for her child inside of Zeus's head, which caused Zeus great pain.Also, Ira was NOT a sister or wife of Zeus; I know a lot about greek mythology, and I've never even heard of her.You repeat yourself with several things. You need to work on spelling and grammer as well.
    • 24/09/2003
    • 17:11:54
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Grammer and sentence structure!

    You need to work on your grammer and sentence structure (run-on sentences, very awkward sentences, etc.) You also had quite a few spelling mistakes. You left an incredible amount of information out. You didn't even say what Hermes is the god of; he is the god of theives. You said that you need the points from the essay, but really, if you need points, at least write something that is helpful. You didn't even cover the basics.
    • 24/09/2003
    • 16:57:09
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A few corrections

    There were a few mistakes I thought I would point out. First of all, Apollo is not the Greek god of the sun; that is Helios. Apollo is the god of light. This is a very common mistake.You called Dionysus chaotic and frenzied, but I'm not sure that that is really an accurate portrayal, since Dionysus is always said to be very gentle.Themis did not give Apollo his bow and arrow, Zeus did.Niobe had fourteen children, not twelve, and it was not Leto who heard of Niobe's arrogance, but Artemis and Apollo. The two took it upon themselves to kill Niobe's children as punishment. Daphne's father was named Ladon.You had a lot of good information, but your word choice and sentence structure could use some work.
    • 24/09/2003
    • 16:43:58
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done!

    Great job! This essay was well written, easy to understand, and displayed a knowledge for the topic as well as being insightful. Good word choice, format (had an intro and conclusion), and overall a great essay.
    • 23/09/2003
    • 15:28:34
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done!

    There were a few grammatical errors, and the name of the movie should have been italisized, but other than that, it was a very good essay. You have a good structure, use excellent words, and make the reader interested in what you are talking about.
    • 23/09/2003
    • 13:53:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Good detail

    Although short, this was well written, comprehensive, and easy to understand. I'm not sure what how long your essay was suppose to be, but if it was only suppose to be a page, then this is very good. If not, then you could have tied it in a bit more with the effects on people's lives.
    • 23/09/2003
    • 13:46:36
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good job

    You did a good job in providing descriptions and, in most cases, examples of their appearance(s) in Greek Myths. I think it would have been good if you had also mentioned Echidna, the so-called "Mother of all Monsters".
    • 19/09/2003
    • 15:42:12
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Repetitive

    You repeat yourself a lot, which clutters the paper. You also contradict yourself several times: For example, in the sentence "Athena is considered the main character in this story because she appears many times during the story and is close to the main character, which is Odysseus." You say that both Athena and Odysseus are the main character. You also say in the conclusion that Athena is the only female character in the story, but in your first paragraph you suggest that there are other female characters (which is correct).
    • 19/09/2003
    • 15:40:02
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • A bit redundant

    You seemed to repeat yourself a lot in this paper. You made your point clear, but the essay was cluttered. Try not to repeat yourself in future essays.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 15:29:39
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A few things

    The first thing I noticed was that you switched tenses almost immediately. You began by saying that Zeus "was", and then started saying that he "is". You switch tenses several other times as well; you should try to keep it consistent.You also mispelled quite a few names, such as "Apollon" for "Apollo", "Athene" for "Athena", "Amalheia" for "Amaltheia", and "Hephaistos" for "Hephaestus", to name a few. You also spelled Cronus in two different ways in the paper.You need to work on organization and grammer. You also would have done well to have a conclusion. This essay could have had a LOT more information.Just as an interesting fact that would have fit well in your paper: Amalthia, the goat, cared for Zeus when he was a child, along with several nymphs. From her horns flowed Ambrosia and Nectar, the food and drink of the gods.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 11:56:00
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Intro and conclusion

    This essay could have been a lot better if you began with an introduction (including a thesis statement) and ended with a conclusion to summarize.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 11:38:56
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Siblings!

    One other point you could have mentioned about their relationship is that they were also siblings. However, since this was not a matter of concern to the gods, it may not have beeen relavent to your paper. I think you did a good job on this paper overall.
    • 19/09/2003
    • 11:33:24
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Explain more

    You do too much sumarizing and not enough analyzing. You have many quotes from the play, but you do not explain the significance of these quotes. Your thesis needs work, and the points in the body of your essay need to be tied in with your thesis. You also need a conclusion. You used good quotes, if you had only said why they were important to the point you had to make!
    • 18/09/2003
    • 17:20:07
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Organization needs work

    Other than a few grammer errors, you also jump around a bit. For example, I was a bit thrown off when you went from the movie description to your opinion of scenary and special effects, and again when you went to the details of the story of Merlin. You need to work on transitioning between paragraphs and subjects. The information itself was decent.
    • 18/09/2003
    • 13:57:34
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Wonderful!

    This paper was beautifully written! Your words were vivid and descriptive. Your introduction and conclusion were phenominal, and I never got bored while reading this. I would give this full marks.
    • 18/09/2003
    • 12:03:56
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great job!

    Short and to-the-point, but full of great information. You stay focused and presented your research well. Great job!
    • 17/09/2003
    • 14:27:18
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Patience!!

    Look, the administration is very busy, I'm sure. Besides, they allow time for the users on the site to read your pending essay and rate it so that they can better judge whether or not to accept your essay. In fact, I don't think cheathouse.com reads your essay at all. It depends on the ratings the essay gets. You couldn't have waited very long. In the future, give it a few days. If your essay stays in the pending area for a week, THEN you might want to POLITELY inquire as to why it has not been rejected or accepted. The reason might be that the system has been having problems, who knows? Furthermore, there is a link on EVERY page of the help section for you to contact CheatHouse.com with any questions or problems, so if you found no way to get in touch with CheatHouse.com, then I doubt you looked.
    • 17/09/2003
    • 14:05:27
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    It was short, and could definitely have been expanded upon, but your information was good, you stayed focused, and you had a reasonable conclusion.
    • 17/09/2003
    • 13:57:30
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • More detail, some errors

    First of all, you could add a lot more detail. For instance, in the first paragraph you said that Jury service is our civil duty-- but why is it our civil duty? Also, the sentence in the 1st paragraph starting "Without a jury there would be no such thing as a "fair trial"..." is saying that the system is harder to corrupt without a jury, but I think you wanted to say the opposite. (It also says that without a jury, there is more than one person deciding on the verdict).In the second paragraph, you say that Jury service is obviously important because it was put into the constitution. However, I don't think that this is a good reason for explaining why Jury Duty is important.I think the information is good, and you had a decent conclusion.
    • 17/09/2003
    • 13:53:02
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Re-read your work!

    You have a quite a few errors (spelling, grammatical, word usage). You should re-read your essays before handing them in to make sure everything is ok. As for the information, it was well organized, and your research was very good.
    • 16/09/2003
    • 14:41:31
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • The topic...?

    Your essay started out well enough, aside from a few punctuation errors, but in the middle you seemed to switch the topic from Hieroglyphic symbols to the English alphabet. That was a bit confusing; you may want to work on your transitions. On the plus side, it was very informative.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 15:18:28
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    This paper was well written, but you could have been a bit more analytical. For example, you could have related the characters in the book to the historical Russian figures whom they portray. But over all, a good job.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 14:42:41
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Although short, it was well written and a good overview of the subject. Since you got 100%, I am assuming that the assignment was only suppose to be a few paragraphs long, and if that was the case, it is very good.
    • 07/09/2003
    • 10:47:44
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good!

    Though certainly not a pleasant topic, this paper was well written and very informative. You definitly deserve the grade you got.
    • 05/09/2003
    • 13:06:36
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Not too bad

    I noticed that you had some negative ratings, but no one had bothered to tell you WHY that didn't like your essay or how you could improve. I thought that was unfair, so I decided to give you my honest opinion and some advice if I could offer any.I think you could have been a bit more detailed. For example, you mentioned that Truman did everything he thought necessary during the cold war, but you didn't say what he did. You also have some spelling and grammer errors; remember to use a spell-checker. Other than that, I didn't think it was too bad. I hope this helped.
    • 04/09/2003
    • 15:32:54
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • A few mistakes, but very good over all

    Other than a few punctuation and grammatical errors, this essay was very well written. It was informational and well organized. Great job!
    • 04/09/2003
    • 15:17:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.