You really need to break up the paragraphs. They are extremely long and tedious to read.
- 29/01/2006
- 12:26:08
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You really need another paragraph at the end closing your thoughts and summarizing or recaping what you wrote.
- 29/01/2006
- 12:22:33
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You might want to consider being a little more concise and reduce your paragraph and sentences lenght. It gets really tiring to read.
- 10/01/2006
- 14:14:08
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I like to way you write. Clear and concise.
- 10/01/2006
- 14:11:57
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
It would ahve been nice if the bibliography was there.
- 10/01/2006
- 14:09:46
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Great Essay. You were able to bring the subject to life and keep it interesting.
- 01/12/2005
- 23:38:49
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Well writen, however, some of the paragraphs are awfully long and there is no transition sentences.The subject is interesting though.
- 27/11/2005
- 20:46:45
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
You have great information in here; however it is very poorly written and some of the information is duplicated in different portions of the essay.
- 08/10/2005
- 12:42:36
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and it is interesting how close we actually have to study other country's business process and ethicsGood
- 11/08/2005
- 21:36:22
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
this is a duplicate essay
- 11/08/2005
- 21:23:01
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
The information is interesting; however, there are too many single sentence paragraphs. It is strange that you got a 90% on a college level essay.
- 12/06/2005
- 14:10:14
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Good information; however, the essay would read much better if you move paragraphs around to follow some type of sequence. Also , try to avoid single sentence paragraphs.
- 12/06/2005
- 14:04:21
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This essay was copied from http://members.tripod.com/~dlane5/die1.html writen by Brian Walsh published by MSAC Philosophy Group
- 10/05/2005
- 12:33:41
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
some of the sentences were run-ons and were is the conclusion?
- 28/12/2004
- 11:10:39
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Very insightful essay and easy to read.
- 28/12/2004
- 11:08:19
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
what can we do though, we will be there someday. Watch out world, baby boomers approaching senility on the roads. That is a wonderful bumper sticker.
- 28/12/2004
- 09:32:59
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A few suggestions: Do not use contractions on an essay; it is one of the basic rules in English writing. The use of "I" is assumed thus not required. The reader knows it is your opinion thus the "I" is not necessary. You also mention, "They should also ask question to see if the person wants the job being offered or does he/she just needs a jobs desperately." This should be used in the body of the text not in the conclusion paragraph and some ideas or examples of the questions might help.For some basic writting rules http://weather.nmsu.edu/Teaching_Material/soil501/writrul.html;for some basic business writting rules http://www.hut.fi/~rvilmi/LangHelp/Writing/
- 30/11/2004
- 09:30:10
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Not a bad paper. Good information and nice essay structure. Spelling and grammar need some work though.
- 30/11/2004
- 09:09:15
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Not sure where you got your information, howerver the earth is quite older than 4.5 million years old. They have found fossils older than that in Africa resently. I am pretty sure your instructor would have got that info thus not rating you with a 4.0. Perhaps 4.6 billion years. Check this gov site. http://www.newton.dep.anl.gov/askasci/gen99/gen99168.htm
- 26/11/2004
- 10:55:31
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There are several good things about Argentina. It is a beautifull country, beautifull people. They treat visitors very well and they are proud of their heritage. Brasil currently have and has hed previously very similar issues as most of the countries in South America. In a way I think it is called growing pains of a nation.
- 03/11/2004
- 13:44:51
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Watch your verb tense. You are going allover the place.
- 03/11/2004
- 13:33:55
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
That is why they say it is in the discretion of the judge/court. Law is a beautiful thing
- 03/11/2004
- 13:28:34
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Interesting information. Eye opener actually.
- 03/11/2004
- 12:56:16
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Funny paper, great imagination
- 03/11/2004
- 12:34:52
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
funny. Good and funny
- 03/11/2004
- 12:31:59
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great paer, however the conclusion is a bit weak. Perhaps from the perspective that I am biased about one sentence paragraphs.
- 02/11/2004
- 12:40:12
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Good essay content. Check your spelling though, there are some words misspelled and quite a bit of passive sentences.
- 10/08/2004
- 13:18:25
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Good essay, however it would have been nice to try and incorporate, some of the examples and citations within longer paragraphs. There are several 1-paragraph sentences in this essay, making the thoughts somewhat incomplete.
- 10/08/2004
- 13:12:09
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Good paper. however too many 1 sentece paragraphs, looks like the though is half done. A paragraph should have more than one sentence, it should concist of assertion, reasones for the assertion and data supporting that assertion.
- 19/06/2004
- 21:30:17
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Great paper. Well research. Good job.
- 19/06/2004
- 21:26:07
- Score: 24 out of 25 people found this comment useful.
very good paper, very informnative
- 29/05/2004
- 23:39:35
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
This is a copy of an article "Information Ethics: On the Philosophical Foundation of Computer Ethics" written and posted by "Luciano Floridi" even to quote by Virginia Woolf is copies from the cite. Good grief this is pathetic.
- 09/04/2004
- 15:37:38
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Great paper. I actually could see it in my mind the pictures as I was reading the paper.
- 09/04/2004
- 11:18:14
- Score: 21 out of 24 people found this comment useful.
Good paper, however it would have more credibility if some resources were cited.
- 09/04/2004
- 11:04:02
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Good paper, however it would be of greater impact and information more credible if references were used and some research was included.
- 07/04/2004
- 14:55:39
- Score: 13 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
good info. good reading flow.
- 02/04/2004
- 14:59:53
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
wow, very well writen. An eye opener
- 02/04/2004
- 14:53:20
- Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
Nice info but formating would help the readability.
- 02/04/2004
- 14:42:33
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Interesting info, however some of the sentences make no sense. For instance ... "If this is able to be done then every United State's citizen will have a better chance for life." Might be better is rephrased. "The number of names being added to the National Waiting List is increasing at a staggering rate. Non-resident organ recipients are further increasing the rate on the waiting list. Non-resident aliens should be placed on a different list as to give priority to United States citizens." This being just a suggestion from a literary standpoint, as I totally disagree with the statement made. From my perspective the statement is a total disregard to the human race giving the selection criteria to race.
- 02/04/2004
- 14:16:56
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
The information is interesting but some of the paragraphs are very long and difficult to follow. You might want to revise some of the longer paragraphs and try to break the information.
- 02/04/2004
- 14:00:49
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
very good information.
- 02/04/2004
- 13:53:24
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Wow love the way you write. Great job.
- 02/04/2004
- 13:31:34
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
lots of great information. Check youline spacing on certain paragraphs. The sentences are broken in the middle and moved to next line.
- 02/04/2004
- 13:09:31
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
It is a very information paper, however consider revising 1 sentence paragraphs and double check spelling.
- 02/04/2004
- 12:53:43
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
you might want to cite where you got your information as some of the information provided could not be verified or confirmed.
- 02/04/2004
- 12:51:58
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Good topic and good content, however the paper is not fluid, it is very choppy and difficult to follow. Some transitional sentences would improve the quality of the paper. In addition, spelling should be checked for instance: "I have chose the theme" s/b "I chose the theme" or I have selected the theme" or "I have chosen the theme"
- 28/03/2004
- 13:27:52
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
On a paper, the "I" should be implied not stated. This could be a much better paper if the "I's" were removed. Also removing sentences, which ends with prepositions, would help the sentence structure and readability.
- 28/03/2004
- 12:58:46
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Very well written essay, however a conclusion paragraph restating the main points of the paper would be enhance the quality of the paper.
- 28/03/2004
- 12:37:32
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.