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  • Timeless pride and prejudice

    Its funny the characteristics that make Elizabeth modern today, we take pride in, and at the time, women like that would have been prejudice against.
    • 29/06/2007
    • 20:31:58
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  • There is always another opinion

    I refuse to believe any character of Jane Austen's masterpiece is 2 dimensional, Lady Catherine probably surrounds herself with people to make her feel better about herself and reassure her. That's why she so adamantly against the marriage, not only because she would lose control, but because it would make the most suitable marriage for her daughter a failure (something Mrs. Bennet is devastated about when the man is above their station, well not technically.)
    • 29/06/2007
    • 16:59:56
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  • Give Austen's characters more credit

    These arguments are far too broad, Frankenstein's monster can easily be called childlike, but Jane Austen's Elizabeth is blinded by miscommunication, no communication , gossip and a con man she may be called naive, but not to the point of a child. She may have been called wild, but I believe that was an intentional exaggeration by the writer, to show the shallowness of the other characters and not a fault of Elizabeth's.
    • 29/06/2007
    • 09:39:17
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  • Layers of readers

    The passion in your writing comes across strong, it makes the essay easy to read, although I find I am not convinced. Now I have read the book and seen the films, but I'm afraid its not the complexity of the words I love (although there are few lines...) but the emotion and the humor of the book, and I believe, that is what truly creates an ever growing fan base.
    • 29/06/2007
    • 09:22:29
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  • Pride is not only for Mr. Darcy

    I believe if you argue that the theme of the book is not marriage but the pursuit of it, you will have better represented Jane Austen's work. It will also open the door to be able to use all the other unions (and non unions) as examples of pride and/or prejudice.
    • 29/06/2007
    • 08:41:13
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  • Hmm considering murder are we?

    In reality, the death penalty hasn't lowered crime rates, the US is one of the few countries in the world that still enforces it, and has a notoriously high crime rate. There is also the moral issue, as in don't we condone murder if we commit it to get rid of people we feel don't fit into society by committing it. Oh and using your logic, if you are planning on killing cross the state line, you may get away with 25 to life.
    • 28/06/2007
    • 20:38:22
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  • Interesting

    This is not what we would call a traditional book report, normal you say something and follow it, thus proving your statement with a quote, here you've given us some really long quotes. It was an interesting read though.
    • 17/06/2007
    • 08:35:42
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  • Wonder if the local library carries a copy...

    Frankly its not the best book report I've ever read, the second paragraph is an endless list of characters, without first telling Gus that the book is about an endless list of characters, but I must admit, I will look this up. Sounds great.
    • 09/05/2007
    • 09:04:43
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  • If it doesn't make sense in the polls...

    Most politicians are looking to eventually get reelected, and creating a draft creates new voters, (esp younger voters) and the new voters would vote (more so with an unpopular war) against those who voted for or are unopposed to a draft. Its easier to simply pour money into increasing enlistees.
    • 09/05/2007
    • 08:57:42
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  • Past tense

    hmm, if you had written the essay mainly at in the past tense, then the last line could suggest that she was still going over her mind the events that lead to her going home
    • 27/04/2007
    • 09:02:22
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  • By who your friends are

    If you really want to get a rise out of people mention the other countries in the world that still have the death penalty. According to Amnesty International "In 2005, 94 per cent of all known executions took place in China, Iran, Saudi Arabia and the USA."
    • 27/04/2007
    • 08:30:55
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  • Up to date

    It could be the source, this issue has been around for a while now, and there are articles published on the topic regularly, your source is a little outdated (ten years) and the points you argue are not that strong, something which could have be remedied with a more recent source, with stronger up to date arguments.
    • 23/04/2007
    • 14:37:21
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  • Even the now quieter side of the aisle

    First of all they say Pat Tillman wasted his life because he died in friendly fire, which is always a wasted life. second of all, how is this war, saving our freedom? you could argue we had more freedoms before the war. the orchestrators of 9/11 weren't Iraqi, we weren't trying to secure our freedom, but our safety, by looking for wmds, the proof of which was untrustworthy, and by now has proven to be false. (the reason the whole scooter libby Valerie Plame started with her husband Wilson, who discovered lose ends in Africa, where the weapons where going) third 100 to 250, not exactly huge numbers, plus these men and women weren't drafted, they enrolled, (if there was a draft, no doubt this number would be of more significants and I wouldn't presume the runaways haven't already been to Iraq once) there will always a few people who sign a contract and then try to run away from it, in every aspect of life. fourth full of tyranny, ran by money-hungry, power-tripping dictators who don't care about our well being, but only about the amount of money in their bank account, can be argued to be the present, rights restricting, low min wage, going to war to get oil, higher taxes, outsourcing work to only certain bidders, leaving kateria victims to fend for themselves like we're a developing country, appointing friends to important positions, could go on with list of scandals government. only one of your sources is from this year all the others are from two years ago and from one book, before even the republicans started getting quieter. i suggest you buy a new book, watch a different news station, and open your eyes. if we dont get the country away from the current money grubbing tyrants, we will not only lose this war but the next one, a much scarier one that we are not prepared for.
    • 19/04/2007
    • 12:03:12
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  • Please advise

    Well seeing as how the stanzas repeat it would be great if we could get read instructions, so we know if we are supposed to change the tempo, or use a drone like voice. i mean i guess you could leave it up to interpretation. A favorite poet of mine, Vachel Lindsay, has a poem the Congo, http://www.bartleby.com/265/193.html that actually included the reading instructions with the poem in some publications.
    • 19/04/2007
    • 10:29:59
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  • If it wasn't for the shortage

    Right now, the western world doesn't have enough science students, Americans and western Europeans just aren't enrolling as such, and when there is a shortage in anything demand goes up, the only way we can supply the new students is if we encourage people here or import them from other countries, its not only a matter of contribution, but a matter of balance in society. Also universities often make a lot of money through their scientific discoveries, and thus directly encouraged to provide more.
    • 19/04/2007
    • 09:25:19
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  • The skills of a poet

    I've written poetry for a long time now, I started very young, and there were quite a few years where I refused to write essays and always presented my teachers with poetry instead, well other than reading and reading and then reading some more poetry. I find that the best way to improve yourself is to become uncomfortable, read other poets and choice topics and styles you would never consider using, and then write in them. You sound comfortable with the style and subject you've written, challenge yourself and write about a sea battle or aliens, something you never give much thought to, try writing an essay assignment as a poem (although from experience I can tell you if you turn it in, some teachers will really not be pleased) write a long winded single stanza, or a rap song. You know experiment and have fun, and save everything in one book, in chronological order if you can, so you go back and look at your progression.
    • 16/04/2007
    • 09:17:12
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  • Structure

    Its starts off pretty good, you have a good grasp of the story itself, the last sentence of the first paragraph needs a rewrite. It goes a little downhill towards the end, there's nothing wrong with what you had to say. but everything you sought to show in the intro should have been its own paragraph. and you need to have a conclusion. So basically you just need to create more structure. You probably have heard this before, but if you create an outline it really does produce a more organized essay and often it saves you the trouble of having to go over what you've written before you turn it in. ive used outlines before writing essays on exams in uni, and often the organization has lead me to As. Plus if you learn the skill early on, it becomes easy to use later and thus gives you an advantage over other writers.
    • 13/04/2007
    • 09:42:10
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  • I wish it were different, but I think even I would have goofed off

    Well when you get to university and look around the room (if you're sitting in the back of a stadium classroom) you'll notice that many laptop users are playing games, chatting, look up irrelevant things online. I believe the only way computers can enter the average school, is if the school has control of it, and thus would have to be owned by the school. Because if university students that had to apply and write essays and pay thousands of dollars to go to university goof off, what will the high school students in public school do? I suggest you try to get your local county or P.T.A at first to raise money for workstations in every classroom (not just computer labs) in order to obtain a more practical version of your goal.
    • 12/04/2007
    • 10:53:48
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  • Making a conservative,

    This is why age is such an issue, if your in elementary school, just for correct use of the word tyrannical you get extra brownie points, but I can't tell, so please include it. Assuming you are its great that you attempt to separate ideas with new paragraphs, you still have to learn to write intros and conclusions, but I cant go on assumptions alone, and so I'm going to have to rate conservatively.
    • 11/04/2007
    • 17:15:12
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  • Globalized treat

    Ah, I'm sure it fulfilled the assignment requirements and was interesting, I like the fact that you didn't forget the wrapping and toy, but after reading i wish you had named the essay, kinder surprise, a globalized treat.
    • 11/04/2007
    • 16:12:02
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  • Poetry

    I followed your link, thanks for including it, nice poem, country town that is, I would have never have given it much thought if it wasn't for your analysis. I love the last bit "Find me a bench, and let me snore, Till, charged with ale and unconcern,I'll think it's noon at half-past four!"In general I think when people discuss your topic rather than your essay you can take it as a compliment that you can write.
    • 11/04/2007
    • 15:48:02
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  • Overlooked flights

    Well written. There was just one point I felt was a little overlooked. I believe the one of the later flights of 9/11 crashed into the ground ground a safe distance from New York and DC because people on that flight turned on their cell phones to tell their family that the plane had been hijacked and their families told them of the situation and people on the flight took action. I would imagine that turning on a phone in an emergency even on a plane is more common place, and that it does save lives, (although not necessarily that of those on the flight.) I would look into cell phone use before flight crashes, cause I knew through association a family who died on the helios flight and people on the plane were said to have texted people back home.
    • 11/04/2007
    • 14:28:27
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  • Interpetations

    The relevancy and modern interpretations of the amendments is a well discussed issue, the first and second come up all the time. The third will probably come to use if we do have a war on us soil. Although you could say that while they no longer enter our houses without permission, they do invade our homes in other ways wire tapping and reading emails are sort of the highlights of the moment, it would be interesting to try and revive meaning to the third amendment, so it could have modern interpretations.
    • 11/04/2007
    • 14:07:11
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  • Its ok

    You did a fairly decent job overall and I enjoyed reading it, however your title the bit about friend or foe, wasn't brought into the essay until you were half way through it. Also your last paragraph was only relevant to the previous two, and it introduced a new concept.
    • 10/04/2007
    • 15:05:03
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  • Well...

    Although this is general well written, supported, and your opinions come out loud and clear. You have a few too many words or terms in quotation marks. This would be fine if you were reading this, or expressing these opinions, but on the written page they stand out. a rewrite would be difficult (how many times can you use the term "so-called") however I believe you have the ability to do so, and then send it off to local newspaper editors.
    • 06/04/2007
    • 08:30:25
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  • Opinions

    Actually I would disagree with exlawyer, if you open the attachment you'll see the rest of the essay, and this opening paragraph is the highlight, I found it going a bit downhill from there, once her opinion became involved, I think it would be better if it wasn't in the first person.
    • 05/04/2007
    • 11:55:58
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  • 6th grade, elementary

    This is great for a sixth grader, it has a great number of ideas, many of them use a good deal of imagination, instead of limiting his view to what can happen in Miami within the next couple of years, he has a vision for the future, one that kept me reading. Writing long essays isn't a skill that is well toned till like the 8th grade (if ever) and I think this student has potential.
    • 02/04/2007
    • 14:25:05
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  • Proof that outlines work

    Good work, the essay has a thesis statement, topic sentences and reads as if you first wrote an outline, exactly what every essay should have.
    • 30/03/2007
    • 08:03:42
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  • Pop poem

    lalablinkyxoxo, usually essays about poems don't include the poem in them. If you do want to read the poem I have included a link. Copy paste it into your address bar.http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/barbie-doll/Now eric86 if you choose this poem on your own then I applaud you, its a good choice, any poem that combines pop culture and a clear message is both interesting to the reader and easy to write an essay on. For a 9th grader you did very well. :)
    • 29/03/2007
    • 15:02:23
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  • Use of pop culture

    The use of both Gandhi and superman, two very well liked and somewhat sentimental figures applies to me, and I would guess the average reader. I love that you ended with that Einstein quote. you could have used it earlier on in the essay, but it wouldn't have provided the sentimental ending it did. Your tactics appeal well to readers, at least myself. this is somewhat unrelated, but I was thinking of the female Indian director, Deepa Mehta, who directed water, a film nominated in the 2007 Oscars, the faith people put in Gandhi is one of the many things portrayed in that film, its worth a watch. I haven't yet checked what other essays you've written, but I'll check them out.
    • 09/03/2007
    • 08:59:59
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  • Drinking

    I just love your title. I was trying to find the origin of the expression, and failed. :(
    • 19/12/2006
    • 16:26:50
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  • Sane

    Interesting topic and well written paper, especially for a twelfth grader. I prefer reccomending books, however while reading this I couldnt help but think of the french film "king of hearts".
    • 19/12/2006
    • 16:09:05
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  • Little fact

    Simpsons premiered in the winter of 1989, (not fall) it was a xmas episode, the one where the family gets santa's little helper, and thus the reason why I remember it was December.
    • 03/11/2006
    • 12:31:00
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  • Simpsons analysing americans

    The simpsons take the premise that they are "just a cartoon" and use to get away with saying and doing anything and everything they want to. They are very critical and out there and all of that at an eight-o-clock time slot. Think about it. The episode you described was the first one made and it brought up issues that other sitcoms don't have the courage to deal with until they have built an audience and have been on the air a few years.
    • 03/11/2006
    • 12:20:45
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  • Defending californians

    Half of california is being pushed up the coast not into the ocean. And californians arent really afraid of earthquakes, we're used to them. And sort of look foward to the next one because our population density goes down after. (often people new to the state move out.) I imagine its the same way with the parts of the country with tornados, hurricanes, blizzards, etc.
    • 03/11/2006
    • 11:54:09
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  • Mix it up

    I liked it more in the beginning, you sort of lost me towards the end. Try mixing it up a bit, changing the style slighty so it becomes disturbing or something (sort of a little horror story of its own) just an idea.
    • 03/11/2006
    • 11:30:04
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  • Title of the book in essay's title, for readers sake

    For those of you wondering the book is 'Mrs. Dalloway' by Virginia Woolf.
    • 03/11/2006
    • 11:15:40
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  • Throwing stones

    Hey 9th grader who can "write munch better". "munch" should be spelled much; "i give it" should be I'd give it, and "lack detail" should be lacked detail. In order to be able to claim that someone else cannot write, ideally you should have the ability to spell, and decent grammar skills.
    • 02/11/2006
    • 11:57:37
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  • My high school physics teacher recomends

    "The boys from brazil" a film that covers cloning, and the extent people will go to perfect clones. I wont say more, check it out.
    • 02/11/2006
    • 10:53:29
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  • Nasa can write

    There's a reason this is well written.
    • 02/11/2006
    • 10:43:23
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  • Pollution friend or foe

    Say you could get everyone on some sort of public transport, the amount of public vehicles that would be needed to accomodate them would be in such large numbers that it may effect pollution negatively (because even electricity is mainly generated in an environmentally harmful way.) Thus it wouldn't really decrease pollution, just possibly traffic (assuming there are no cabs, and a lot of heavy rail).
    • 01/11/2006
    • 17:33:38
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  • Putting other 8th graders to shame

    Once again as an 8th grader you amaze me.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 17:11:35
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  • 8th grader?

    You put to shame other 8th graders. Just based on the polarization of the votes for and aganist you proves your ability to write well enough that the essay becomes about the issue and not the writing.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 17:08:49
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  • Don't be afraid to name names

    You know when you say 'adult magazine', I think it sounds worse, it could be anything, something completely unknown and... well. He wrote for playboy.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 17:00:49
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  • Dr. seuss' war

    You got me interested enough to open up the figure links and look at them, recomend it, it's really odd to see such a childhood favorite in a different light.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 15:48:04
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  • Fairytales in new clothing

    Originally fairytales were very different, if you read the originals all sorts things have been taken out for the sake of children. There are meny famous stepmothers in fairy tales, all of whom were originally the mothers, rape has also been completely removed, little red riding hood (did you think the wolf really talked? this isnt disney, animals dont talk) and I think the italian version of sleeping beauty (she woke up pregnant). And there's a reason so many stories end happily ever after, they've been altered. If society decides to alter the stories they will, although its harder to control, (the printing press is no longer limited to a select few).
    • 01/11/2006
    • 15:11:12
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  • Don't forget "fat boy" (name of Nagasaki bomb)

    The only thing that bugged me was that Nagasaki wasn't mentioned, but other than that good essay.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 14:44:32
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  • Tilt a title

    I think the title should be altered to include Hitler in it.You focused on him a great deal, and the essay would be better repersented by the altered title.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 14:31:40
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  • Ctrl + v

    It repeats, so using math the essay is really like 2100, (not the exact number because the ref dont repeat) but there's no shame in a tenth grader writing a 2000 word essay.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 14:18:16
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  • Huh, title

    Usually longer titles are good things, however with this title you limited yourself to not only one war, but limited the application of the poem to, well war.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 13:39:19
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  • Its good

    But the title is wrong, calling it the Great Gatsby sets limits you clearly left, nothing wrong with that, but I'd like to know what title you turned it in with.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 13:30:29
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  • Thesis statements

    When you have a teacher who wants you to include thesis statements, first thing you do, when you are writing an outline (which the average student gets one grade higher just by following one) put a rough thesis statement in it.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 11:48:59
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  • Complete history

    The second clan was inspired by the film "birth of a nation", which is still said to be used as a form of recruitment. It shows the klan's early ability to influence through use of a media, a theme which could have also be carried throughout the essay, added dimension, and possibly bring the b to an a.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 11:22:05
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  • Walking while on walks

    32 sentences the word walk or walking used 27 times. That's a lot.
    • 01/11/2006
    • 10:18:48
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  • The Klan

    Huh, a klan essay that doesn't mention 'Birth of a Nation'.
    • 29/10/2006
    • 08:44:57
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  • Freedoms

    Imprisonment is about taking away a person's freedoms, that's why they become institutionalized, however, suicide, the decision to live or die, is the one remaining freedom inmates have.
    • 26/10/2006
    • 10:11:14
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  • Infants and the disabled

    First the infants were orphans "I say "orphan" to avoid the complication of parental feelings, although in doing so l am being overfair to the experimenter, since the nonhuman subjects of experiments are not orphans." second, he wasn's actually saying let's perform on the disabled (later in the essay he spoke only of them "To avoid the complication of the relevance of a being's potential, however, I shall henceforth concentrate on permanently retarded humans.") he was just trying to be outrageous to prove his point.
    • 26/10/2006
    • 09:44:41
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  • Very informative

    I've read various historical accounts of robin hood (was one of my childhood favorites) I have never come across some of yours. Cool.
    • 25/10/2006
    • 23:34:31
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  • Sleeping beauty

    Very interesting, I have read a lot about fairy tales over the years and although I have read many interpetations, (especially on sleeping beauty, since that was my childhood favorite along with robin hood) I have never come across one that focuses only on menstration. Cleary I've missed Bettelheim's work.
    • 25/10/2006
    • 23:15:39
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  • Three little bores

    Alright, it's not the best revamping of 'three little pigs', but it's pretty cool for a 9th grader. The only thing that really bugged me was that boars was misspelled as bores, which mean they're either holes or very dull pigs.
    • 25/10/2006
    • 22:27:32
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  • The note

    I'm not sure if it was intentional, but the note in the beginning actually adds an extra element to the poem. Liked it.
    • 25/10/2006
    • 21:54:13
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  • Children's lit

    I took a children's lit class once, Perrault was of course covered, as well as the Grimm version, and we even discussed Goldwater, however dahl's wasn't and after your essay I read the book (only 23 pages afterall). Loved it, anyhow, I love it when writers include unorthodox tellings of a well known tale, oh and if you haven't looked up Angela Carter's version, which is probably in 'Bloody Chamber' I just looked it up, (had the book handy,) its called 'the company of wolves'.
    • 18/10/2006
    • 10:15:10
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  • The year threw me off

    1993? The book was published in 1988, and the film released in 1996.
    • 18/10/2006
    • 08:42:55
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  • 1962?

    I read around a bit, the coach was first used in 1724 by Catherine I for her coronation, Catherine II, (aka Catherine the Great) used it for her coronation in 1762. The film Catherine of Russia was released in 1962.
    • 13/10/2006
    • 12:20:20
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  • A few years later

    OK so you liked her in 2003, a lot has happened since then, do you still see her as an idol, or as someone who should be idolized?
    • 09/10/2006
    • 16:55:17
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  • Like it

    I think I like this essay a little too much, I mean the topic is hardly refined.
    • 09/10/2006
    • 16:43:35
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  • Suggestion for readers

    Greatly improves if read out loud.
    • 09/10/2006
    • 16:18:42
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  • Very sweet

    I couldn't help but think of the book "The Notebook", the scenes with the elderly couple were always my favorites.
    • 03/10/2006
    • 14:38:12
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  • Legacy of suicide

    Everyone remembers the suicides, it stays with the family for generations. Like this dark hole that no one can approach. The suicide in my family still effects us, and he was my great great uncle. His direct decendents still morn him, they still cry and there are only a few people in my family who actually knew him. But everyone knows of him. The tears never stop, its not an ending, but a book with the second half of it torn out.
    • 02/10/2006
    • 16:33:53
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  • Art

    I've actually had many discussions in art classes about graffiti, in general classes using a more traditional medium tended to not see art in graffiti. However the definition of what is and isn't art is always in question. I have no doubt that graffiti is art. I have seen some amazing pieces (although I must admit I prefer the work being done in europe more, esp switzerland and germany.) Graffiti is a temporary art form, it will naturally disappear over time, and there is beauty in that, it will also be painted over and lost, but some of the greatest pieces ever created have been lost and ruined. I would love to see more "galleries" in the us feature it. and by galleries I mean good work being displayed next to each other (outdoors of course, giving it easy access) oh and bansky site also had some nice drawings.
    • 02/10/2006
    • 15:05:31
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  • California?

    MITM, is one of those shows, like the simpsons, where certain details are never given out, and deliberatly confusing. Although unlike the simpsons, MITM keeps secret not only the state they live in but also the town, and their last name is never mentioned, (although an early episode has a glimpse of a name tag that says wilkerson).
    • 30/09/2006
    • 11:56:08
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  • The second Howard

    You called Catherine Howard his fourth wife, and that bugs me, it may just be a typo, but if you consider her to be his fourth, then it seems he was quickly forgiving of the Howard family, and he wasn't. The only wives executed were Howards.
    • 30/09/2006
    • 09:24:59
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  • Seymour

    Jane Seymour, his third wife, was not executed, she died two weeks after having given Henry VII, his only son, who later became Edward VI.
    • 30/09/2006
    • 08:46:45
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  • Smiles

    So the story itself, not great, I think calling it a dream was an easy out. But it was well written, so that makes it a smiley.
    • 16/09/2006
    • 20:38:50
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  • Moments

    Love the imagery in the beginning, although you do lose the sort of romantic sense that the snow is more than just snow after you start talking about school. The moment is lost, you could say.
    • 16/09/2006
    • 20:31:44
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  • Visions

    The visual imagery is strange, although that can make it a little confusing, it also makes it powerful.
    • 16/09/2006
    • 19:59:03
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  • Cool

    (speaking of spelling mistakes, there's alot in this one "dangerous my heart beets faster" beets should be beats.) other than that its an angry poem, and if the last line is read as rebirth it adds another dimention.
    • 16/09/2006
    • 18:19:33
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  • Hey

    So I've read a few of your poems already, this was a harsh breakup, for the average poet this would be good, although from yours its not my favorite, but I'm going to keep reading.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 13:40:03
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  • Lots of questions

    I liked it, but it kind of read like lyrics, I dont know why, that's just the impression I got.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 13:36:17
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  • Ok I read this twice

    The first time I barely noticed it, the second time I read it out loud and loved it. Don't stop writing.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 13:32:56
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  • Definition

    I love the way the story is presented, especially the beginning, it defines it more as an emotion or feeling than story.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 13:11:46
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  • He was the timberman

    Light and funny, I enjoyed the poem, I think I'll go around and read everything else you have.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 12:53:50
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  • Ideas

    Ok well obviously someone with power in the school should be a villian, perhaps the principal or vice. The chemistry teacher could be suspected, but at the end be a super friend. Other possible villians techno boy, rapid report girl (school paper 2nd editor), also try working with transfer students, an villian transfers and his/her enemy follows, half the student council could be the principal's minions. There's a lot of directions you could go, I could probably brain storm more, but since you havent signed in for a year, I figure i'll wait to see if you come back.
    • 15/09/2006
    • 12:44:19
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  • Giving the game away

    That first character, the main character we meet who slipped out the word eating gave the twist away from the beginning, if he hadn't, the story would be about a somewhat eerie town, that the character and reader cant quite figure out, and I believe that would make a superior story. Look up jackson's "the lottery" or dahl's "pig"
    • 16/08/2006
    • 13:52:28
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  • Anne vs. rilla

    You managed to convince me, but I've always prefered comparision papers, and I think comparing anne's adolescence to rilla's would make an interesting paper.
    • 27/07/2006
    • 13:41:34
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  • Un?

    The essay was good, covered a great deal (although there's a few places I would have said more, but thats me) its just I was a little confused as to why this essay is out under the subject united nations, political science or even biography might have been a better choice.
    • 23/05/2006
    • 16:38:08
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  • Perhaps

    This poem has been viewed more than 100 times, sometimes in order to get an opinion across is easier to do through a short poem that reaches a wider audience through simpler vocabulary.
    • 22/05/2006
    • 13:53:58
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  • The viewer

    Think of the point of view of the film goer as well esp the costume, with the leather, scissors and crazy hair, generally the audience reaction would be to think of the character as a villian in a horror film. However in this film the audience quickly sides with edward, breaking the movie villain sterotype. in fact the movie even villianizes anthony michael hall (jim) an actor known at the time for playing sweet nerds.
    • 22/05/2006
    • 13:36:27
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  • Only one suggestion

    Usually the title of the book and often author is posted as a part of the title of essay, so that later on the essay can be more easily found through a search. Other than that good essay.
    • 22/05/2006
    • 13:00:57
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  • Lack of links

    I was trying to find a free sample of "for no one" to link onto here, but I couldn't find it, I suppose its because "revolver's" cd came out so long ago. Anyhow link to the lyrics http://www.mp3lyrics.org/b/beatles/for-no-one/ oh and well I should say cool analysis, I got my beatles cd out after reading this.
    • 19/05/2006
    • 15:48:38
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  • By plane, train, and car

    There's a john hughes' comedy from 1987 with steve martin and john candy called "planes, trains and automobiles", depending on your teachers appreciation for cross referencing, it might have been fun to have had a slightly different title. (for those who don't know john hughes, "ferris bueller's day off" writer and director)
    • 17/05/2006
    • 15:44:58
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  • Re: article on bard.org

    I used to live on the island, andI've seen the baths of aphrodite many times, so I looked up your source, and he did claim that aphrodite washed ashore near nicosia, but nicosia is not on the coast of cyprus and her birthplace is in fact 25 km east of paphos. (which is not all that close to nicosia)
    • 17/05/2006
    • 15:24:37
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  • Possible source

    Although I'm not sure this is the writer's source, some of the figures do match up. http://www.deathpenaltyinfo.org
    • 17/05/2006
    • 13:17:23
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  • 60 min

    "60 minutes" recently covered a related topic, I couldnt find the original video, but here's an article on the study they covered: http://www.southernvoice.com/2006/4-7/news/national/gender.cfm
    • 16/05/2006
    • 12:03:32
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  • 1st sentence

    The first sentence is sort of floating by itself, if that were changed. Or the end of the essay extended to include the upcoming witness scence, the first sentence would make more sense.
    • 15/05/2006
    • 16:35:43
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  • In case you really want to write

    Scripts are a minute a page on average, so with a sitcom that would be around 21 pages.
    • 10/05/2006
    • 00:47:51
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  • What about Barrett?

    Although true that Lurhman movies have fabulous costumes, think moulin rouge, Kym Barrett is also well known, mainly for the matrix, which although (the first one) chiefly remembered for visual effects, could not have completed the work without Barrett's costumes.
    • 08/05/2006
    • 22:03:57
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  • Good news

    According to this article here http://news.independent.co.uk/media/article326315.ecethere are going to be new british adaptions coming out in the fall. And I don't know about you, but recently I compared the book and both the recent us and the '95 BBC production. And I definetly have a favorite within the films.
    • 07/05/2006
    • 00:37:52
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  • The crawford

    I never spent this much time with this crawford in what I suppose is the female heavy triangle.After thought: I've never really researched how much time Austen spent picking names, but I suppose the name "Mary" could repersent Magdalene.
    • 07/05/2006
    • 00:29:38
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  • Spelling

    Now normally I try not to bring up spelling when I critic essays, I was an editor throughout high school and college for others and I am well aware of how little spelling has to do with the overall outcome. However in your case because you have misspelled the title of the book, it seems the average person has not found your essay to rate it.
    • 07/05/2006
    • 00:19:09
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  • She's a he.

    Gorky wasnt a woman...http://www.16beavergroup.org/mtarchive/archives/000439.phpthis is an article on him.
    • 05/11/2005
    • 18:58:39
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  • Pretty good.

    I like the opening line, I think the main character needs a little explaination (but that could come later on). Oh and I dont really care for the girl's name, I was a little thrown off when I got to it. A really cool thing to do is spend some time on behindthename.com and actually pick something out that relates to the character. Just a suggestion, but other than that keep it up.
    • 02/10/2005
    • 15:01:44
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  • Writing

    you complain about writers, yet you can write, but hey thats what writers do.
    • 22/06/2005
    • 14:48:37
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  • To improve

    if you had kept her small size til the end, she would seem stronger, altogether you give away the reasons to easily, usually if we understand/like the character early the impact of their struggle is better placed.
    • 09/05/2005
    • 18:17:25
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  • 10 days

    very interesting, and i was really into the story, its just that at towards the end you name the deaths of the sisters as the 1st and 21st and then say it was ten days apart, it unfortunately sticks out a little too much after such a nice essay.
    • 15/04/2005
    • 00:43:20
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  • Concent

    Assited suicide should involve consent, either the person or whoever has legal guardianship has consented then you have to respect what they feel is best.
    • 08/04/2005
    • 20:29:55
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  • Murder

    youre trying a little too hard (women tend not to be serial killers anyway, so if it were a man it might work better) and swift as a horse, dont compare the women to a horse.
    • 01/04/2005
    • 11:56:34
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  • Herbert

    i once read a short story called something "Why Herbert Killed His Mother" it was obivously about son that killed his mother, look it up.
    • 01/04/2005
    • 11:48:16
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  • For more info

    for more info and a complete list of last year's banned/challanged books. you can go to ALA's (american library asso.) site.http://www.ala.org/ala/oif/bannedbooksweek/challengedbanned/challengedbanned.htm
    • 16/03/2005
    • 11:50:18
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  • Compare

    whereas the comparision btw honeymooners and flintstones are well know, ive never thought of the simpsons in relation to all in the family, ill keep an eye out for traces of archie in other characters.
    • 15/03/2005
    • 02:46:59
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  • Pretty good

    just a thought, the little headings, e.g. conclusion, take away from the flow of the story, perhaps a double (blank) line instead, but otherwise pretty good
    • 14/03/2005
    • 02:34:03
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  • Cute

    i know this is supposed to be a serious subject but i cant help but find this cute.
    • 13/03/2005
    • 03:40:17
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  • The second half

    the only real issue i have with this essay is, this movie is very long (a little under 4 hours), and the description is only for the first half.
    • 10/03/2005
    • 20:47:52
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  • 6th grade

    this is really impressive for a 6th grader.
    • 10/03/2005
    • 20:19:01
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  • 8th grade

    pretty impressive for an eighth grader.
    • 10/03/2005
    • 20:11:09
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  • Austin and carter

    im a fan of both, and id never thought to compare the two stories.
    • 07/03/2005
    • 17:44:18
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  • Variation on fairy tales

    to truely have a twist on the typical females of fairy tales read angela carter's versions.
    • 07/03/2005
    • 17:26:10
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  • Pop culture pie

    Well written, one of the better pop-culture essays ive read.
    • 07/03/2005
    • 17:03:20
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  • 9th grade

    a well deserved A for a 9th grader, im thinking of going around and reading your other essays.
    • 04/03/2005
    • 21:36:54
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  • Chauncey and forest

    chauncey (only in the movie, and not the book) and forest really are similar, although i think the message the movies get across through these very lucky men, is in fact very different.
    • 04/03/2005
    • 14:05:24
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  • The differences

    well west side story is modern version of romeo and juliet so some changes in venue had to be made, i think the actual differences in the storyline are a little more important. such as how the story is now about a poor couple (not the combination of two rich ones in verona), that the issue was now a cultural one, and no longer the matter of a name (a rose by any other name would smell as sweet) and the ending, its no longer suicide on both ends.
    • 03/03/2005
    • 20:28:12
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  • Just one thing

    the paper is fine, i just felt that the fact that clueless is a modern remake of emma should be mentioned. its sort of like a paper comparing west side story and romeo and juliet without ever mentioning the story's the same.
    • 03/03/2005
    • 20:02:56
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  • An ideal husband

    i have read and seen this play performed and the audience including myself seems to have laughed at the wrong lines. i would love to see this essay expanded to include other plays by wilde, but i will reread this one, oh and a helpful hint, many older books and plays have expired their copyrights and now avalible for free off sites such as the gutenberg one. (publisher of the first printed bible)
    • 03/03/2005
    • 14:47:15
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  • Male and female

    its nice to find an essay on sex appeal that remembers to cover both males and females.
    • 02/03/2005
    • 03:02:30
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  • Richard hooker

    although the MASH movie and tv show are more commonly known (and great) much of the credit goes to the book, by hooker which came first, and should be checked out.
    • 02/03/2005
    • 02:02:38
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  • Murder

    great for an 9th grader, plus added bonus for introducing a line of books i may read. ive always been a holmes fan (bbc 7 online sometimes has them on the old radio program) although, this year i recieved a book of hitchcock favs. try em.
    • 02/03/2005
    • 01:43:55
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  • Women's studies

    a professor of mine even used this movie during a WS class. a point made in class was although the movie covers many problems the 50s era of women dealt with, dont forget it concentrates on rich, white educated women
    • 01/03/2005
    • 18:28:34
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  • Longevity

    ive never given much thought to opening credits, esp with the current trend of cutting them out. however the simpson's one does seem to be well thought out, a lesser version would be annoying after what, 16 years?
    • 01/03/2005
    • 03:16:15
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  • For more info

    To find out more on books that are banned you can go to the ALA (American LIbrary Association) sitehttp://www.ala.org/ala/oif/bannedbooksweek/challengedbanned/challengedbanned.htm
    • 01/03/2005
    • 01:22:00
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • 2nd grade

    this just doesnt seem to be written by a 2nd grader?
    • 25/02/2005
    • 22:58:57
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  • Just the last bit

    if it wasnt for the last few lines i enjoyed this essay. its just too cliche i think.
    • 29/12/2004
    • 22:57:06
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  • Potential

    ive always loved twists, and shocking endings and the younger you can think of them the better. you can really take this somewhere. im looking foward to part two. i always recommended to my high school friends who liked twists forsyth's "no comebacks" its his short story collection
    • 26/12/2004
    • 20:58:46
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  • Should sound more like an old detective narrative

    "Obviously, the man was there for an unusual purpose."this line is excessive, and generally speaking the essay is too wordy, try thinking of a narrative from a noir film, better match. also "dang" isnt really very discriptive of a old clock tower bell, nor is it a word thought of as a sound. not the way say dong or ding are.but anyhow, with a slightly more mainstream style, the piece could be short and sweet, after all there's little else to say.
    • 29/11/2004
    • 09:04:46
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  • The assignment

    although i feel you could have gone a lot futher, making some bits more obbessive, or if it seemed normal til a line at the end, all in all, its not bad, and seems to have accomplished what was required for your assignment
    • 25/11/2004
    • 23:56:55
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  • Ends well

    although it did not start off sounding as anything but a boring english assignment, it ended with creativity, in order words it was no longer quite so corny.
    • 25/11/2004
    • 23:46:31
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  • Your level

    i got the sense you were not a native english speaker and thus reread the essay with that in consideration, and it became a much better essay
    • 25/11/2004
    • 23:37:55
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  • Deserved the grade it got

    regarding the other two comments, let us not forget that this is a 14 year old writing. although definitely a B and not A essay, it seems to satisfy the requirement of the essay quite well for someone at that age, and writing experience. it sounds like a typical o-level short essay. well done.
    • 01/07/2004
    • 19:57:48
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.