I just want to state again that the Japanese were looking for a way to end the war ... they were actively seeking a way to extradite themselves by seeking a conditional surrender. The condition placed on the surrender was that the Emperor was not to be tried as a war criminal. The reason America refused a conditional surrender is bound to the war politics of WWI and the need to find a scapegoat ... the loss of both Mussolini & Hitler influenced this, & it can be seen in the way that Tojo was held as a "prise" for the American SCAMP team! Ironically enough, the Emperor was not tried as a war criminal. Thus the use of the Bomb is all the more appalling.
- 24/07/2004
- 21:43:16
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Unfortunately I no longer have the footnotes on my computer, please consult the bibliography.Any one considering the Americans to be justified should read this ...Weber, M. 'Why the Atomic Bombings Could Have Been Avoided: Was Hiroshima Necessary?' Institute for Historical Review <http://www.ihr.org/jhr/v16/v16n3p-4_Weber.html> [27 April 2003]
- 04/03/2004
- 03:27:15
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Why do feminist cling to the idea as woman as inferior to men as something to fight about? Women have not always been the submissive sex, the common attitude towards women was revived in the 1800's (Victorian era). History is littered with eras where women gained as much status as men, in some ancient civilisations, in Latin Palestine during the middle ages, and in the 1700's when the enlightenment saw that 'women were not thought to be the same as men they simply required that they be treated with deference and respect that was their due as women'. Perhaps if feminists were not so intent to crying about inferiority and demanding equality and accepted that they were 'different' not always better though not always inferior attitudes toward women would once again change.Well written but there is so much more to consider.
- 09/07/2003
- 16:12:35
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http://www.academiclibrary.com/view.php/History/2035.htmhttp://www.electronicreferences.com/view.php/History/2035.htm
- 25/06/2003
- 01:00:28
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I'm not sure about curriculum in America but maybe they don't have a choice about what they can teach you, or perhaps that's just American teacher mentality. Is history the only area that American students are brain washed in?The other thing to consider is the time they have to teach you any history at all, though it is still important to be objective, perhaps things are left out because there is not enough time to deeply analyse every aspect of a historical period.
- 23/06/2003
- 18:45:05
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http://www.freeessays.cc/db/44/smu338.shtmlhttp://www.electronicreferences.com/view.php/Biographies/198.htm
- 23/06/2003
- 18:30:43
- Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
The structure is good, grammatical errors make it a little hard to read. The content reflects a basic understanding of the UN's role in world affairs.Personally I believe that the UN needed to try the 'coalition of the willing' as war criminals at the end of the second gulf war to have any credibility now and in the future.
- 23/06/2003
- 01:15:17
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You need to re look at an adequate definition of fascism.Two historians to look at are Payne and Griffin. An out line of Payne's typological description of Fascism can be found in A History of Fascism, 1914-1945. UCL Press, 1995. p 6 and Griffins theory as fascism as a form of palingenetic form of populist ultra-nationalism can be found here http://www.brookes.ac.uk/schools/humanities/staff/FAECRG.doc.You also need references and a bibliography.
- 22/06/2003
- 21:05:04
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Well written, well referenced, and very well argued. Some grammatical errors. I do, however disagree with the argument, I have an IQ over 120 and I was severely beaten as a child.
- 17/06/2003
- 20:30:11
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The only thing I would suggest is references and refrain from using first person. I've gotten into the habit of say "this essay will examine" "it can be seen that" "evidence proves this" and so on and so forth.I'm not an expert on these subjects but they all appear that they are well written and well researched, a big smily face for you.
- 16/06/2003
- 20:06:47
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Well written, very interesting. Again I would suggest referencing or at least a bibliography other then that good job.
- 16/06/2003
- 19:56:19
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Well written and very good analysis into the origins of the hundred years war.Two things I would suggest, references and rather then "However I believe" try "however it can be seen that".
- 16/06/2003
- 19:50:18
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Interesting argument that stems from personal experience. 'If we are not in the conditions like Gabriella or patients that have been resuscitated fifty-two times, we do not have the right to die.' And what about for example an 80 year old who has lived their life, are dissatisfied with the quality of their life and experience the pain of an ageing body? There are many factors and I agree that before euthanasia is implemented there should be a substantial reason for a patient to want to end their life. Well written.
- 15/06/2003
- 00:12:58
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I wont condone the practice but I will say this, this ritual is apart of their tradition it has religious undertones, who are we, outsiders of their world, to say what is right or wrong for them?
- 14/06/2003
- 23:30:39
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Referencing would have help. Other then that it was a very informative essay.
- 14/06/2003
- 22:59:51
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There are a few discrepancies in this essay for one you have your dates wrong. The plague struck Europe in December of 1347 and had effectively run its course through out Europe in December of 1350. The effects of the plague in Europe were unprecedented before this time and the most commonly accepted statistic is that 1/3 of Europe population was affected.In "Symptoms and Other Such Things" you fail to mention the three varieties of plague, bubonic, pneumonic and septicaemic. You also fail to recognise that in this period the plague was not the only pestilence running rife. From documents of the period describing the plague it can also be assumed that diseased such as typhoid, anthrax and syphilis were also prevalent.In "Some Disturbing Statistics" you mention that the plague affected people because they didn't bathe, this is fallacy. The Bubonic plague was transmitted through flea bites, pneumonic was a viral contagion and septicaemic was transmitted though bodily fluids.The other verse to the rhyme isThe cows are in the meadow eating butter cupBless you bless you we all jump up.There is dispute over the origins of this rhyme, some say that because there is no written record of it in the 14th & 15th century that it was in no way related to the plague but being that children's rhymes are oratory this has little substance.Pies and marathons have little to contribute to your essay, leave them out!
- 14/06/2003
- 22:22:03
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While I agree with the argument against censorship I am hardly about to go and argue against film classifications. The relationship between film and music is hardly different, I wouldn't allow a 12 year old (for example) to watch a porno or 'American Psycho' and I wouldn't want them to listen to some of the stuff I've been hearing coming out of music studios either. I am unsure where I stand on the subject of the 'parental advisory' stickers though, because unlike R rated movies explicit music can be sold to minors and some children (persons under 18) look at these stickers as being recommendations, as some how they are 'cooler' then others because they have explicit music.
- 14/06/2003
- 07:18:11
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Interesting but I believe this consumerist desire only applies to the superficial masses that have more money then they know what to do with. I guess until I stop being a poor student I will stick to my utilitarian style of clothing that only allows me to buy new articles when the old no longer fit or have worn out. Maybe you could look into the origins of this consumeristic desire that drives the herd to purchase fashionable clothing.
- 14/06/2003
- 06:56:12
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Good observations about todays advertising industry. It's interesting how trends change, I remember reading once that the job of advertisement is to make people feel guilty.
- 14/06/2003
- 03:42:03
- Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
This essay is complete fabrication. I assume that you are confused about the century you are talking about. Twelfth century costumes were by no means "captured by elegance, mystery and creative design". As a rule women wore a chemise as an undergarment, sack like dresses to the ankle, the variations of the dress were back and side laces. Men wore shirts with a tunic, breaches and hoes. Cloaks were more often then not from ankle length or knee length.From the sounds of your essay I'm guessing that you would be talking about the 1500-1700 period but it's hard to tell. Your references to twelfth century theater leave me confused.Have a look at this link.http://www.costumes.org/pages/medievalinks.htm
- 14/06/2003
- 03:17:52
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Apart from practicality the reason women's skits got shorter were because of cloth shortages, full skirts were a waist of a precious resources. Be wary of concluding an essay with such vague comments that you provide no evidence for and contribute nothing to your argument.
- 14/06/2003
- 02:55:55
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I'm assuming that you wrote this as "what do I expect to get out of this" prose. Just make the purpose of the text clear in your introduction, it was a little vague.Try making art for yourself. After reading some of the art critical essays here it seems there are too many students thinking art is some visual philosophy, in my opinion all that boils down to is the mental masturbation of the pretentious (please don't be offended my that phrase). Art can be an expression of anything it doesn't have to make a statement.good luck with the class, i hope you get what you want out of it
- 12/06/2003
- 19:48:42
- Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
This essay make little sense, contradicts its self and suggests that the author does not understand the subject matter. One needs to have intricate understanding of art before one can define it. I'd suggest you look into the history of art and the avant guard.
- 12/06/2003
- 19:32:47
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I found a copy of this essay here http://www.essaymill.com/free_essays/inmers/m1168.htmWhat bothers me more though is that I am sure I had read it else where as well.
- 12/06/2003
- 19:11:49
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Interesting analysis of both poems, well done, good comparison and examination of the period in which they were written.
- 12/06/2003
- 05:39:52
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Very well argued and well referenced, though in some circumstances I think breading in captivity programs are necessary.
- 12/06/2003
- 05:23:06
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
In the end it's a much of a muchness, I could have equally argued either way on the subject but I found an article that really helped my argument if I went this way. If I had the time I could probably write an equally argumentative essay against.Indeed politics are cruel ...Check out this reversionary journal.Http://www.ihr.org/Thanks for the comments.
- 12/06/2003
- 05:17:13
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
It's a good argument, while I know nothing about the computer industry, it adequately argues your point in the length required. I'd say reference (yes I am the referencing fairy) but being an exam I guess you don't have to.
- 11/06/2003
- 20:54:37
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
You seem to spend too much word space describing the art work and the museum, when one would think that you would discuss the reproduction and the presence of an art piece. Also for such an argument it would have been interesting and added more depth to your essay if you had read and referred to Walter Benjamin's 'the age of mechanical reproduction' I think was the title of that essay (it's been 4 years so forgive me if have it wrong).
- 11/06/2003
- 20:24:04
- Score: 34 out of 36 people found this comment useful.
Interesting story and an interesting attempt at powerful writing. I wonder if you aware of the movie by the same title 'Gods and Monsters'.
- 11/06/2003
- 04:45:42
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
This essay has no logical structure. It's titled Medieval Cathedrals but there is little examination of specific cathedrals there is no definition of what a cathedral is. You touch on themes that emerge from the 12th century renaissance but you mealy list some facts instead of developing ideas. You do not examine the transition from the Romanesque style of architecture to Gothic.
- 11/06/2003
- 04:22:37
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
While being well written and well referenced your essay focuses on the ideals of the time and not necessarily the truth. You fail to address the sexual hypocrisy of the epoch. You might be interested to know that some 30% of women in London in the 1880's had engaged prostitution and the many brothels were actually running of property owned by the church.A notable fallacy in your essay 'Women, who had been repressed much prior to the Victorian era,' the preceding era was the enlightenment, a time when women gained status.
- 11/06/2003
- 04:10:20
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Take a look at interesting online journal articles at http://www.ihr.org/The myths of Hitler are astounding, be wary of spreading fallacies allythegr8.
- 11/06/2003
- 03:54:08
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Because your essay structure has no consistent flow it is very repetitive. Keep ideas together for a more comprehensive essay. Also note that the minor spat between the French and English royalty (100 year war) had a lot to do with a dispute over the succession of the French crown.
- 11/06/2003
- 03:43:30
- Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
Your opening sentence contains a fallacy, and the lack of referencing lend little credibility to your essay. If you are writing an essay it is better to write in prose form then just sentences that stand alone pretending to be paragraphs. Elaborate on your ideas.
- 11/06/2003
- 03:18:46
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Very well written though (as already mentioned) references are needed. You fail to mention that South Australia was originally an Utilitarian experiment, which is why, in my opinion its history is more interesting then other state capitals.
- 11/06/2003
- 02:52:07
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I fail to understand the purpose of your essay. It begins as informative prose though by the end you are arguing a point.If you intend to write argumentatively it is imperative that you state your thesis at the begging of you essay.For example "This essay seeks to identify the problems with atomic warfare in the 21st century by looking at the history of the atomic bomb, the issues involved in waging atomic warfare, the problems with weapon upkeep and the influence of social opinion."Some errors in grammar, spelling and the misuse of tense make this essay hard to read.
- 11/06/2003
- 02:40:06
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
A very well written and informative paper. References would be helpful as would a deeper examination of Darwin's theory of evolution (particularly how it was adapted to be applied to the Aboriginals).
- 09/06/2003
- 19:33:54
- Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
I think you focus more on describing the works of individual art pieces rather then focusing on interpreting them based on their social and moral background.You fail to mention that Edourard Manet's Olympia was shocking because it presented the French middle class with a painting of their own prostitute.If you could, please comment on my artanalysis, I would really appreciate a critical review.
- 03/06/2003
- 04:17:29
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Excellently researched (though I noticed that references were missing) avoid using such broad sweeping terms like 'evil'. I think you completely ruined your argument with the statement "Hitler was undeniably a monster and an amoral man". How do you expect to have credibility if you can't write with out prejudice. Every one is so up in arms about being politically correct but it's just as bad to have a liberal bias as to have a conservative bias.
- 03/06/2003
- 03:34:30
- Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
Very well written it's great to see a bibliography too :DHowever, I will advise you on the dangers of a 'too liberal bias'. While being left is gaining popularity these days it also shows prejudice. You should be able to report the facts objectively, and this is so very important. The article you have use for you argument was great, I haven't read it but I assume that you have retold the facts from it adequately.But your argument fails to address the 'fallacies' of other media portrayal. There is strong evidence that in the Aboriginal community there is a negative side, these stereotypes came about for a reason you only have to go into one of the east coast cities at night to see this. My own views of people have developed from experience, go into the Brisbane Valley after dusk or go into Aboriginal communities to work as volunteer aid and report what you see, would you still have the same view.You also fail to address truths that would have helped your argument and shown examples of the kind of stereotype you would want to replace the negative one that is prevalent today. Something that comes to mind is aboriginal artists.
- 02/06/2003
- 22:58:06
- Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This essay lacks specific evidence as to the 'necessity' of feminism. Do not confuse the feminist doctrine of 'equal rights for women' for basic human rights or problems manifested in 'father daughter' relationships as granting 'equality' to women often has little to do with these very much separate issues.
- 27/05/2003
- 04:20:56
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That you titled this "Crusades in Europe and how it effected everyone during their time" you really should have paid more attention to the effects of the crusades. In both the west and the middle east.As for the effects of the crusades in Europe things that would have given the analysis more depth would be stuff like English attitudes towards a king (Richard) who spent more time warring then at home ruling and who taxed heavily to support the third crusade.Also a topics you might like to look at in the future would be the 12th century renaissance (see. the 12th century renaissance by Charles Homer Haskins) and the black death. More so the 12 cent. ren. because the crusades contributed to this in part.You fail to mention that the Albigensians were Christian heretics, a quote noted from the time (by Christian crusaders, note not an exact quote) "kill them all [Catholics and Heretics] God will sort the sinners out" a good source on the albigensians is Jacques Madaule.You fail to note that Frederick II was more or less forced to take the vi crusade and that after being excommunicated he decided to have himself crowned king of Jerusalem.The viii crusade should have been included (I believe).
- 27/05/2003
- 04:07:44
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A good examination of the film for a high school paper though the references in the film to communism (obvious place to start would be Marx) were missed. Perhaps you could also look at contemporary moral and social philosophies.
- 27/05/2003
- 03:31:35
- Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
There is minimal examination of how this relates to Americans or how it ridicules them. More analysis needs to be considered to offer insight into what could have been an interesting essay. (& being Australian the added analysis might have been helpful rather then relying on the reader to make the assumptions for themselves)
- 27/05/2003
- 03:18:49
- Score: 11 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
I got the results back today (the day I submitted it) I honestly don't think it was worth 95% being that this is a major essay for a third year bachelor degree. I would like an outside opinion if I can ;) ta.taralc.
- 27/05/2003
- 02:32:52
- Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Lenka raises an interesting point though in your scenario the doctor and wife are friends, occupational roles and obligations aside why not tell her friend that her husband is cheating her? A logical argument to this would be that the information was obtained through her practice. I think you fail to explore all possibilities in this argument.
- 27/05/2003
- 01:21:05
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Interesting analysis of the facts of the murders and of the suspects, for a more in-depth analysis it would be interesting if you had have looked more into social and moral values and views of Victorian London.Suggested sources to look at would behttp://www.victorianlondon.org/Jack the Ripper As the Threat of Outcast London Robert F. Haggard http://etext.lib.virginia.edu/journals/EH/EH35/haggard1.html
- 26/05/2003
- 04:51:28
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.