I think you could use a better conclusion. Your essay just cuts off, when throughout your essay you talk about what a great guy he is. You could conclude with the idea that even though he is dead his creations provide original enertainment that will last many generations. or something of that sort
- 17/03/2002
- 14:45:21
- Score: 7 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
To begin with, I have seen this movie. I think that the movie Twister is a very exciting, up-beat, thirlling, adrenalin rushing movie. The tone and voice percieved in your essay does not match the tone of the movie. If I had never seen the movie, according to your essay, I would think the movie would be quite boring. You could spice it up with crazy, mind boggling descriptions and actions words along with your own opinion about the movie and some suggestions you would make the movie better.
- 17/03/2002
- 14:35:15
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading this essay. It is a "fast" and esay reading essay with good descriptions. I do not get confused when reading the descriptions of the different dulcimers. And the history is very clear and precise.
- 17/03/2002
- 14:24:10
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
Keep in mind when writing an essay that the reader doesn't know everything you do. For instance when you talk about "Kelly and Joe" in the thrid paragraph, I don't kow who they are. It might seem tedious to explain who and what everything is but it will make you writing stronger and more clear.Other than that I was very interested and have never read anything on this subject before. I had no clue there was so much involvment.
- 15/03/2002
- 10:41:12
- Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.