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  • Excellent

    This is a great eassay on weather or not the Whitlam Dismissal was in fact the people's choice or not. Keep up the good work.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 23:25:14
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • GREAT!

    This essay is one of the best I have ever read in relation to the Aboriginal people's of Australia and their treatment in the period from 1960-1975. You have included all the relevant information without being long winded. You have obviously done a lot of research. Keep up the great work!
    • 09/09/2003
    • 17:52:45
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Missed Alot

    You have missed a lot of important information out in this essay! How did the Australian population start to increase? Because the government started to allow people into the country that were not of anglo saxan origins. They also lost the yellow peril attitude and started to let people in from singapore, malaysia, indonesia and such? Why did they do this? How did imigrants contribute? Snowy Mts water scheme. There is so much more that you could have added in to make this essay a lot more appealing to a marker. Dont jump straight from how immigrants were treated into the treatment of Aborigines, you lose the reader when you do this. Try again.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 17:42:21
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Work

    Why did assimilation end? What was it replaced with, Integration, how did this effect the aboriginal population? Well written essay on the stolen generation.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 17:31:23
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Good Stuff

    Was this essay infact a book report or an essay? If it was an essay you need to make detailed reference to your question in the introduction. If it was a book report you have done well. The quotes you have used have been explained well and in detail, something that will always attract marks. You need to explain what you mean by "...This is where his life ended..." Did his life or part of his life end? Pretend you are a person who has not read the book and see if you totally understand what you mean by it, your teacher will be doing the same thing. A job well done.
    • 09/09/2003
    • 04:16:45
    • Score: 13 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Typos

    sorry guys, the person who typed this could not read some of the words i wrote in my draft. If you need to know any of the words before i fix them up then let me know wot u need 2 know. However, if u can wait then i will fix them up soon...
    • 08/09/2003
    • 00:35:42
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.