I wood have liked you to start the paper off with a better opening, you got staight to the point, which isn't a bad thing but you need to caught the readers attention more! over-all you got all the infomation the reader needed.
- 03/12/2003
- 17:55:06
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Maybe next time give a little more back ground to what ypur essay is all about. Try to capture the reader attention more. But overall it was good.
- 19/09/2003
- 08:35:27
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
I loved the way u started this essay!!! keep doing that in your papers because it caughts the reads eye!!
- 16/09/2003
- 21:10:05
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
needs more detail, But good
- 16/09/2003
- 18:44:35
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.