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  • Grammar and Vocabularly need work

    The grammar and sentence structure in this essay needs to be cleaned up a lot. The information presented is fairly accurate, but should be more indepth. The awkward wording and poor choice of words at some points make the sentences clunky and difficult to read. Rearranging the sentences and using a thesaurus will make the paper flow better.
    • 15/12/2004
    • 15:01:02
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.