During the middle ages, in order to become a knight one had to go through many years of training.
A knight-to-be spent at least fourteen years of his life learning the proper conduct and etiquette of
knighthood. Once the years of training were completed, often an elaborate ceremony took place when the
gentleman was knighted. Once knighted, the man had to live by the code of chivalry. This code had the
basic guidelines of a knight's behavior. This code was so respected that abiding by it brought honor and
respect from others.
The education of a knight began at the age of seven. This was when a boy was taken from his
home and sent to the castle of a famous noble, perhaps his father's lord. Here he served the lord and the
lady as a page until he was fourteen years old. One of the many duties of a page was to accompany the lord
and lady at all times.
He also waited on them during meals, and went with them on various affairs doing
whatever was asked of him. As a page, he received religious instruction from the chaplain. The squires
taught the page fighting skills, and gave him training in arms. The mistress and her ladies taught the page
to honor and protect all women. He also learned to sing and to play the lute, in order to hunt and hawk.
The most important thing that he learned during the seven years as a page was how to care for and ride a
horse. This was a skill that was essential when becoming a knight, because a horse was his primary mode
of transportation.
At the age of fourteen, the page became a squire, and at the same time, was formally assigned to a
knight. He now...
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This essay is very good. There is a lot of information on knighthood, and you took it step-by-step and took time to explain each thing. You used primarily simple and compound sentences; maybe you should stick a few complex sentences in there to make it less repetitive.
Good job on everything else, though.
OH, one more bit: when you were telling about that book, you automatically assumed that the reader would know what you are talking about. Maybe you should give a brief summary of what the book is about or something, and then continue on with your points, because some people who read this may need things to be spelled out for them, and picky teachers (like mine) demand it just because it is a better way of writing (according to her).
Anyhow, this WAS an excellent piece of writing, and very informative.
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