Tanya 10a
The Lake
My head rested peacefully against the bark of the willow tree, my back floated on a bed of grass and my feet were gliding in the calm water of the lake, occasionally being nibbled by various fish. It was the perfect atmosphere to have a little nap; however I knew that if I fell asleep I would regret getting to admire the lake's precious beauty on this spectacular day.
The sky was as clear as sapphire, the sun was a rosy apricot colour and was surrounded by pillows of clouds and somehow my imagination managed to convince me that there were little angels dancing and prancing above them. The sky looked even more radiant in the lake's refection; it added a glittery appeal to it, magical.
I gazed wondrously towards the other side of the lake where the troop of trees stood, practically hugging each other.
I enjoyed watching the giant trees sway with each other as if they were moving towards nature's music. On my side of the lake, there was a choir of frogs chattering and birds chirping. I sang a little melody too, but the frogs and birds suddenly stopped, they must have disliked my tune.
As I was about to rest my eyes a little, nature woke me up. The calming breeze tickled my ear lobes and I could faintly hear it whispering secrets to me.
Every time the wind passed by, it left behind a scent of maple and berries so strong that it made my nose twitch. It smelt heavenly organic yet delightfully tasty.
When I took a careful look at the lake, it looked similar to a heart shape; just one side was slightly bigger. The colour of the water was like an innocent...
A fantastic 89% descriptive piece on "The lake". A well written and thought piece based on my imagination!
I think if you tone down the description, you will get better reception.
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