Detached, a poem of random feelings

The images in ur poem are really strong, 'tis deep nd emotional. It probably describes how many peeps feel.

I really feel the detachment from love. The imagery is very strong indeed. An abundance of ideas are also created.


Things like "the dark center of the colorful world" shows that even the most beautiful things in life have their extreme ugly side, in this case - Love.


I also appreciate the fact that you mentioned self-induce pain. I feel the pain and anticipation because my brother used to cut himself before, and it was quite harrowing. He was diagnosed to have acute depression, which is a medical condition easily derived from relationship problems.


However, I think the end of the poem was too extreme. When you use imagery like "Ravens surround me", there should be more descriptions to show that they are not real. I cannot decipher what they would be. though I suspect you wish to show that they are demons, bringing you to Hell. Your idea of "gone" is weak. You could have used a metaphor or similie to produce the same effect, but not so convergently.

i thought this very well writen, it really expresses how quite a number of people might feel. but you mustn't forget that if there is ugli there is beauti, and from darkness comes light, and there is no need for redness inbetween.

thanx for commenting on my essays guys. in response to kingleonardo i'm not so much trying to detch myself from love but from my friends around me. my two best friends are falling inlove and in doing so i'm fading away. as for the ending i was trying to get at nothing is left but the darkness that surrounded me. i hope that explains a little.

imaproundmac: i understand there is also beauty in life and i completely agree but this was written in a state of depression where i felt there was nothing but the ugly side and darkness and the red is the blood that is the result of the darkness i was feeling. i hope this helps anyones understanding of my feelings when i wrote this piece

this poem is very deep and a little depressing i hope who wrote this poem and is true ablut it talks to someone and gets some help

this was such a great poem, it captures the everyday feelings of depressed people that we sometimes dont notice around us, maybe we should open up our eyes and see that they are in need of a friend