Fahrenheit 451
One of the biggest issues raised in this book was the idea
that people are starting to forget more about books and what they
mean. People have started to take books for granted, instead
of reading books they watch a movie or a program on the
television. People do not realize that books, scrolls,
manuscripts are a big part of our past.
Since the beginning of time, people have been recording
things they saw, did and took part in on birch bark and later
very primitive paper. People do not realize that without those
scratching on the birch bark that we would have no recollection
of the past. Sure there would have been word of mouth, but
things would have gotten so turned around that it would not have
been our past anymore, it would have been a made up one. In the
time of Shakespeare there were no televisions, not even close to
that technology yet.
Who would we study and learn about, if no
one had written things. Man kind would be studying the man who
had invented the television because he would have been able to
record himself, and then everything after that, which is only
about fifty years. But without the recordings of Einstein and
all the other famous scientists, television probably would not be
invented that early.
In our day and age people are watching too much television.
We figure that everything that is in books is on the television.
If we need to learn about something we rent a movie about it or
watch a show on it. No one reads books anymore just for the fun
of it, or so they can read the paranormal, science fiction,
horror, classics, fiction or non-fiction novel that surround our
world. If we want to...
I didnt like it
for starters, the introduction needs more fluff. "people" is so general. maybe "21st century society in the United States" would be more appropriate. or make your own...
if this is an essay, no personal pronouns are supposed to be in it. you used our a few times. just substitute *our* with *the* (in most cases) and there ya have it.
the topic sentence of each paragraph also needs to be fixed. They dont describe the paragraph as their supposed to. you need a more general statement heading each body.
im suprised that this essay got an 80. i wouldnt have given it more than a 40. oh well
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