If to only be with you

This is a great poem. I'm wondering if it is open form or free form though... Some suggestions for improvement would be incorporating some stanzas. I like the repetition of "But if only to be with you". That makes me think it's open form. It definitely leaves you thinking...

I've written poetry for a long time now, I started very young, and there were quite a few years where I refused to write essays and always presented my teachers with poetry instead, well other than reading and reading and then reading some more poetry. I find that the best way to improve yourself is to become uncomfortable, read other poets and choice topics and styles you would never consider using, and then write in them. You sound comfortable with the style and subject you've written, challenge yourself and write about a sea battle or aliens, something you never give much thought to, try writing an essay assignment as a poem (although from experience I can tell you if you turn it in, some teachers will really not be pleased) write a long winded single stanza, or a rap song. You know experiment and have fun, and save everything in one book, in chronological order if you can, so you go back and look at your progression.

I've always found that I do my best when I write about subjects I've experienced first hand. Somehow, the emotions and thoughts get communicated better when I'm putting down things and feelings I've gone through - and people get it. :) As previously posted, try writing about other things. Funny thing is, when I've written outside my comfort zone, they've become familiar after awhile. It's a good way to grow and expand those limitless possibilities. :)


Keep up the good work.