Agent William Klein listened intently, the hairs on his arms and the back of his neck
standing at attention. He knew at that instant that he discovered the Perfect Crime. Smiling, he
nodded his head, and turned off the recorder. He heard enough. The Final Detail clinched it.
Grabbing the phone, his heart palpitating in his chest, he took a deep breath and dialed the
number to the Home Office. "This is it, my big break," he thought, "The boys back home have to
take notice of me now. Yep, pretty soon, everyone will be talking about Bill Klein and the
Perfect Crime."
Lost in his reverie, he missed the instructions of the automatic greeter and waited for
them to start again, adding to his anxiety, his heart pounding harder. Was it 3 or 4 that he wanted,
he wasn't sure. "Damn." Out of frustration he hits "0" and hopes for the best.
When a human
voice answers, he says, "This is Agent Bill Klein in Sacramento. Get me the Big Guy. I found
something. Something big."
"I'm sorry, he is in a meeting, would you like his voice mail?"
"No, I don't want his voice mail. I need to talk to him. I'm telling you this is big, real big."
"Can I give you to his assistant?"
"No!" Slamming his fist on the desk, he takes a deep breath, and through clenched teeth
calmly says, "Listen to me carefully. I do not want his voice mail. I do not want his assistant. I
want him, now. I don't care who he is with, this is the biggest thing I have ever encountered and I
need him."
Within two hours, Agent Klein is on the next flight to L.A. After listening to only a
minute of the recording the...
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I liked what you wrote for the simple fact that it made sense even though the way you wrote (structure) was an awkward one and not too easy to comprehend! I think you did a good job trying to let the reader know what your message was even though it wasn't a real message after all!!
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