A poem about war

Lacks the kind of strong depth which a better vocabulary would improve but overall, it is pretty decent.

the idea you are conveying is lovley, and i do agree. The ryhme scheme is a little odd, but good try. I haven't seen much recent war poetry, which is odd, because it is the one subject that usually gets people fired up enough to want to write about it.

My brother is over fighting in Iraq....this poem means alot to me, thank you.

I like the idea and feeling behind this poem. The author conveys sensitivity and kindness. I think the rhyme scheme detracts a little from the poem's emotion, and some of the vocabulary is a little immature, but overall a very noble effort.

Sounds like something that would come from a middleschool homework assignment, the vocab is a little trite.

This poem has been viewed more than 100 times, sometimes in order to get an opinion across is easier to do through a short poem that reaches a wider audience through simpler vocabulary.