Entering the small office through the glass door, I noticed a friendly looking woman sitting at the desk in back. Noticing me enter she politely asked me to have a seat until she was finished with the person at her desk. I told her I had an appointment with Jane. She informed me that Jane would be returning any moment.
I surveyed the brightly lit room for a place to sit. There was a stout table with a few scattered papers and three chairs lined up along the glass wall. The main office sat directly across from the chair in which I took up residency. There was a rumbling inside me that I could not control as I sat waiting patiently.
The glass door opens and a tall, sophisticated woman enters. She casts a glance in my direction and I respond with a smile. The woman seated at the desk looks up from her work to acknowledge the new arrival.
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English: Untidy Desk
English: A desk in an office."Jane," she begins, "this lady is waiting to see you."
I felt the twinge again. Feeling unsure of what she would tell me, I wanted to disappear from the room. Jane looked at me and reached out her hand.
"Hello." she began as she took my sweaty palm in hers. "You must be Jennifer. Please have a seat."
"Thank you" I replied graciously.
Jane seated herself in the chair and placed her folded hands on the desk. "What can I do for you today?" She waited patiently for my response.
"I've come to get the results for the CAT test I took the other day," I replied nervously.
"Are you planning on returning to school?" she questioned while rummaging through the pile of papers on her desk
"Yes, I would like to finally graduate" I confessed.
Hmm
Hmm...are you sure this is it? is there any continuation to this..I mean it's not bad, or anything but it does sound like there can be more to the story after what has happened!
It is pretty intriguing at first, and it does tantalize me as the reader to read the rest of it, but in the end, to be honest with you i'm kind of left disappointed because I actually want to know what your plans will be and how are you going to reach them!
Plus it is kind of ambiguous in the beginning! You say that you want to graduate really bad, kind of implying that you have been around the school for quite a while and that now you finally want to get out of there!
Again, I might be totally wrong but this is the way i interpreted it!
It can be clearer but as far as creativity goes, it's pretty interesting, and it would be a great piece of creative essay or story if you did expand it a little more!
Don't get me wrong, it's the fact that i like it that made write this comment because i think you can make it better!
*Wink*
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