We were told we could write a story roughly 1000words and it could be any devolpment of ideas.... i did it in script format which i think gave me bonus marks

Essay by naterditHigh School, 11th gradeA+, September 2004

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Cast List:

Malcolm McDowell David

Michael Gover Sergeant Cooper

Miriam Karlin Rebecca

Patrick Magee Fuel Guy

Intention:

My intention with this story is write a story in script format giving me a challenge and that if it was to be made into a play or movie it would not require time to convert it. The story is about a guy 'David who is in love with a girl 'Rebecca' who in return does not love David, at first. She quickly has a change in her heart and decides to love him back; the story has romance as it follows them around their dinners, picnics and love... However, appearances can be deceiving, as David starts to hallucinate terrible things about death, and the only thing that can put his mind to ease will be a visit from the Boy Scout

FADE IN:

INT. Rebecca's house - NIGHT

Dining room from an upper class house with a table to sit 10, filled with a buffet and wine bottles.

Tense but romantic kind of atmosphere.

Rebecca and David, eating, drinking, and sitting opposite each other occasionally glancing at each other.

DAVID

Rebecca I've been meaning to say this for a while now and I just can't bear it anymore, I love you, I have loved you since my eyes first glazed over your body and my ears hearing the sweetness of your voice.

To Rebecca which is looking tense and real nervous

REBECCA

David, are joking cause this is mean... no David I do not love you but I see you as a good friend, a very good...

David's face growing redder and redder with Angier.

DAVID

NO ARE YOU JOKING I LOVE YOU MORE THAN A FRIEND AND IF YOU CANNOT SEE THAT THEN (more loudly) GET... OUT... OF... MY... HOUSE...

REBECCA (V.O.)

David please calm down and this is my house David remember I invited you over...

David stands up grabs a wine bottle.

DAVID (muttering)

Only in death will you see you true love... you Dail Grind

David throws the bottle, it smash against the chair cutting Rebecca's neck

REBECCA (Moving hand too stop bleeding)

Oh-hhh!!!

David gets up and starts to head towards the door

DAVID (sorrow in voice)

Sorry Rebecca I do not what happened over me

David slams the door and Rebecca screams...

REBECCA

It's okay David it is just a scratch

FADE OUT:

Title credits roll

FADE IN:

INT. REBECCA'S HOUSE/FRONT DOOR - MORNING

David standing out side muttering holding a small rectangular box

Rings doorbell

DAVID (muttering still)

Rebecca I'm sorry... NO Rebecca this is a sign of peace MAYBE...

Dorr opens Rebecca stands tall and with a bandage around her neck

REBECCA

Yes David what is it?

David stutters.

DAVID

I got, got this for you

David opens the box and hands it to Rebecca, we see it is a diamond necklace...

REBECCA

Oh, David it's beautiful but this would have cost a nugget

David last night I thought you were joking so I did want to be caught in a trap, I was being over precautious but David I do love you more than a friend... I'm sorry that my screwed...

They each simultaneously bend with a little hesitation kiss a deep loving kiss

INT. BEDROOM - NOON - WARPPED, BLURRED SHOTS

David and Rebecca getting passionate in bed and start to make love

DAVID & REBECCA (V.O.)

Each of them has a mixture of oh and yeah as they make love

INT. "BEDROOM" - NIGHT

Both David and Rebecca are sleeping and camera is on David's eye as it opens

David jumps up as he has been freaked out bad

Camera zooms out to see Rebecca is a dead rotting corpse

David starts to run

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DAVID

What the hell is happening, she can't be dead... how, what?... arghh!

David trips and falls down the stairs knocks his head at the bottom eyes slowly close

FADE OUT:

INT. "BOTTOM OF STAIRS" - MORNING

Rebecca standing above David as he wakes up.

DAVID

Arghhh get away from me arghhh

REBECCA

David it's just a bad dream

David looking confused.

DAVID

But how did I get down here???

REBECCA

You must have slept walked and fell down the stairs

David stands up

DAVID

It felt so real thou, I thought you were a zombie or something.

REBECCA

Ha ha David I can't be dead I'm standing here aren't I?

DAVID

I suppose so... hmm did you want to go out today?

REBECCA

Better yet let's go up to your hut in the mountains

DAVID

That's a good idea I'll go pack clothes and you can get the food

REBECCA

Sure!

David heads up stairs, while Rebecca goes towards the kitchen.

INT. OPEN ROAD - EVENING/DUSK

We see them on the road in a car driving along.

REBECCA

How long do you think it shall take

David turns to Rebecca and sees her as a corpse slumped against the seat.

DAVID

WHAT THE ...

As he blinks he sees her normal again and gazes down to the fuel gage and realises its board line empty

REBECCA (confused)

Huh? David, what is it?

DAVID

Oh nothing... were about 2 ½ hours away, and were out of fuel so I'll have to pull over at the next fuel station

They drive into the distance and you see a fuel station AMPOL and they decide to pull in

INT. FUEL STATION - BOARDER DUSK/NIGHT

David gets out of the car, and Rebecca is asleep inside it. David starts filling up the car as an old guy comes out of the store.

FUEL GUY

Beautiful night tonight isn't it

DAVID

Yeah it is me and me wife are going up to my hut in Mt. Ednah for a while so if the nights are this warm we could sleep outside instead of inside

The FUEL GUY rambles on about the night and then looks into the car and stops halfway through his speech then quickly returns to rambling

FUEL GUY

Yeah sure is a beauty... it has been a while since I've paid much attention to the stars and I haven't seen orions belt in a while too and my star sign...

DAVID

Umm yeah, go on what is your star sign...

FUEL GUY

Uh huh oh yeah Leo, Leo is uh me star sign yeah umm... well...

DAVID

Yeah okay then here's the 30 dollars for the fuel

FUEL GUY

Thanks umm yeah have a good time okay

David drives off... the FUEL GUY goes inside and starts to scribble down EMI-650 as darkness begins to blacken the screen...

INT. CABIN - OUTSIDE - NIGHT

David and Rebecca get out of the car and head towards the cabin which is an log cabin with tall grass growing around it with signs of not been used for a while.

INT. CABIN - INSIDE - NIGHT

David lights the gas lamps inside, and as the light the room you can see it is a one room cabin with all the sections of a house just no dividers; kitchen dining room, bedroom and washroom

Rebecca heads towards the kitchen to start preparing for dinner.

REBECCA

What do you feel like for tea tonight David?

DAVID

I don't know just cook something simple and fast for tea because I want to go to bed tonight to get an early start tomorrow

REBECCA

Okay how about I'll just make sandwiches for tonight I'll cook something real fine tomorrow

As they sit around the dining table they eat there sandwiches in silence.

DAVID

Maybe we could do some bush walking tomorrow and find a spot to have a picnic

REBECCA

Oh, David that is a great idea, just lovely

INT. /EXT. GREEN FIELD/CABIN - DAY/NIGHT

Has Flash of various Scenes

Rebecca and David are sitting on a chequered mat having a picnic

REBECCA

This is heaven, I could not ask for much more

At Cabin, we see them having a candle lit dinner with a romantic atmosphere

Mid moment, flash of Rebecca's face dead and rotting

Flash to them running in field playing TAG, then to lying down on grass rolling around, laughing few slow motion shots, showing the good time their having.

Mid moment, flash of Rebecca's face dead and rotting

Back to The cabin and there we see talking and laughing and a short section on lovemaking and then we get to the scene we're they are dancing around the cabin

DAVID

This is the prefect life, Rebecca I want you to know how much I love you! With all my sol and heart you are why I'm here living, without you I would be nothing a rotting piece of dirt on a hot summer's day

REBECCA (Crying)

This is *sniff* the best moment of my life... you David I wouldn't be here ether if it wasn't for you

This is a slow motion shot of Rebecca falling to the ground but not hitting it being caught by tied ropes on her hands and torso, but as she falls their is a slow degeneration of her body from going to alive to being a 3 month rotting corpse

*BANG* *BANG* at the door

SRG COOPER

David Hassle this is the County police and we have you sounded so please drop to the floor and have your hands on your head

David complies while Rebecca is still suspended in mid air by ropes and he is speaking to her

DAVID

Don't worry honey it'll be okay... *silence* I don't know why there here they must have the wrong hut or something *silence* I don't recall hearing my name are you sure? *silence* well you must do what they say okay?

The door gets kicked open and SRG COOPER makes the arrest while the other police force bag Rebecca into a morgue bag

DAVID (Yelling)

WHY ARE YOU PUTTING MY WIFE IN A BAG SHE CAN'T BREATH STOP IT, STOP IT, STOP IT NOW!!!

INT. JAIL - DAY

We see David sitting in a chair by him self in an empty cell by with no windows but a long mirror camera go through and we see SRG COOPER sitting reading the results of a psychological test and we read...

SRG COOPER (V.O)

While all this is being read out in SRG COOPERS mind we have a series of flash back moments to were we see a previous shot of them sitting to dinner with Rebecca alive we now see that she was in fact dead, same with the picnics and the car trip

Patient #32009RW00454

State of mind: Unbalanced

Results:

The patient was found to have killed the women in a fit of rage with a wine bottle and cutting her neck, he then deluded his mind into believing they were lovers to married. In his mind, he went on picnics with the victim and dinners and all that other romantic jazz including the act of necrophilia. The prosecutor was found out by a fuel attendant who saw the dead rotting corpse of the victim in the back seat of a car and immediately rang as up after he left

SENTENCE: Life possible parole after state of mind is assessed as stable and full evaluation is done

CASE # 32009RW00454 CLOSED

THE END

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