The term, "as listed above" should not be there. I feel that the idea wasn't flowing freely and a few ideas brought into the paper came without explanation. You should try to write as though the person reading has no idea. Writing very descriptively and to the point is a fine art, however you are on your way.A certain sentence struck me in this paper. "From a Federalists point of view, Daniel Webster was outraged at Madison over a conscription bill". I am hoping I didn't mess anything up in that quote. Now from my point of view, without prior knowledge of Daniel Webster, you would have lost me. Who is he? Where does he come in? Why hasn't he been mentioned already if he is a key player in your paper?Maybe you should consider revising these few items, unless your paper is perfect to your teacher's specifications.MariahPre-Doctoral StudentDouble Majoring in Nursing and PsychologyPeace
- 29/10/2003
- 20:31:50
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