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  • The Lion in Summer

    I enjoyed reading this essay. I could visualize being there as I read it.Just a little constructive critisism though. Repeatedly edit your writings. You will find grammar mistakes and small nuances every time; I guarantee it. There is no such thing as a perfect paper.When you wrote about studying the lion tracks, you said that there were two males and a female. When you wrote about coming across them, you said the male was eating and the females were sleeping.Little details like this jump out at the reader and can be easily fixed by repeated editing. Keep up the good work!
    • 22/11/2003
    • 16:35:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.