User Details For: wishiwassmarter

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  • Good

    Good job.
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:37:51
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Facts

    I appreciate that you give both sides of the issue.Although I am pro-life 100%, I think that it is important that one opinion not be impressed on another. Both sides should be given, and those who know in their hearts the truth will make the right decision. When it is said that there are too many unwanted children, that is not true. Many people, such as my aunt and uncle, waited for a child for years. They want another very soon. There are many people that cannot afford the adoption costs, but they could easily afford to raise a child.
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:36:26
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Smarty

    You provided a very comprehensive list of information. I am very impressed with your work.Next time, be sure and reduce your use of "really" and multiple exclamation points.You are on your way!
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:15:37
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • ?

    Where are your research references?When you say lazy nation, I would think that an example of a "lazy nation" would be appropriate. What causes you to come to this conclusion?
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:12:21
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Awesome

    This was great! Very moving and well-researched. I am impressed by your detailed works cited at the end. Many do not include that in their essays.
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:06:31
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    This needs more examples to back up assumptions from your point of view. I agree with the previous comment, that the title does not flow with the essay itself. However, you have a good thing going.
    • 23/09/2004
    • 11:03:40
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    Great different approach to the typical essay. I like the first-person narrative thing.
    • 19/03/2004
    • 17:59:59
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • YAY!

    Thank you thank you thank you! Your essay was awesome, but I would have said something if you hadn't listed your sources. However, you did so, and I am pleased to be in association with you.
    • 20/12/2003
    • 12:30:27
    • Score: 14 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    That was a great story and I'm very proud of you. Are you in school now?I felt that I should say that this is the wrong category for this paper. It is more of a creative writing paper that belongs in sociology. Please check your grammar. "Know," as in "I KNOW her," is not quite like "no," as in, "NO I do not want that."
    • 11/12/2003
    • 13:16:35
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good attempt

    You did a good job, but I don't really know what to say about you stating, "The purpose of this paper..." Sometimes teachers tell us to do things and we do them thinking they're right and they are not. You seem like you worked pretty hard on it, so I won't give you a bad rating. However, remember to cite your sources next time.
    • 11/12/2003
    • 01:09:30
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Pretty Good

    Add a works cited next time
    • 10/12/2003
    • 20:24:13
    • Score: 1 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great!

    That was a great essay! In the future, I would cite my sources.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 18:34:05
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    Avoid using "you" and "us" so much in an essay.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:26:51
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • You're good!

    Great work, just remember to include your works cited. That's what helps us out!
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:23:53
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • WOW!

    Wonderful job! You must have worked very hard on this essay.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:21:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Great job!

    I am in PR/Adv. and I really appreciated this essay. I have a small suggestion if you are willing to accept it- include a works cited in the future so that we can read the books and sources that you have gotten your info from! Keep up the good work!
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:20:09
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Works cited

    I'm big on giving credit where credit is due, so this really could have used a works cited. I cannot rate this paper because I am not sure what grade level you are at. Good work though.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:12:59
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Good

    Great knowledge base, however, it could have used a works cited.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 15:08:32
    • Score: 12 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Rating

    Pretty good, just watch your grammar and avoid using words like, "nowadays."
    • 10/12/2003
    • 14:52:42
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Explanation of my rating

    "That was my first time attends a concert."Hummm.... WHAT was your first time? I've never "attendsed" a concert before either.I realize that you probably just submitted this in order to get points, but there were a lot of typos and grammatical errors.I really am not rating you this way in order to be mean, but I was expecting something with depth.
    • 10/12/2003
    • 14:48:27
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • I appreciate the research on this but...

    Your grammar needs some serious refinement. I am not being mean, but I cannot take this seriously:"They should drink light tea. It provide mineral nutrients like potassium, zinc for them. In additions, child drink tea would have better digestion."It should read:"Pregnant women and children should drink light tea, because it provides mineral nutrients such as potassium and zinc. In addition, children who drink tea digest food easily."Are you really a college sophomore?
    • 10/12/2003
    • 14:41:09
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.