This essay was written pretty good, i didnt like the opening because you used likely right next to each other use something different thats why word has a synonm selection. Those little things will help you to achieve that extra little bit.
- 06/01/2004
- 18:51:39
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I think your essay was very well written. The vocab you put into it made it sound not like the normal person. It had some great points and you brought awarness to other areas most dont see. Great job
- 06/01/2004
- 18:48:26
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Thought this essay was pretty well written. Talk about all his conflicts, mabe could've expanded just a little bit more.
- 05/01/2004
- 21:19:39
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Good opening I like how you started it with something different. It grabed the attention of the reader right away.
- 05/01/2004
- 19:19:02
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.