For a 10th Grader you should know that the body paragraphs must be bigger. Great information. Funny topic. Add more commentary next time. I would have given it a B+. You should merge a few body paragraphs. Again I like the essay but it needs more work. It seems like you need to spend more time on it. Essays take a lot of time. You also didn't mention how the Gameboy Color and Advance Games could not be used on any older gameboy. What happened to the history of the GAMEBOY POCKET, the smallest gaming system of it's time!!! Add another paragraph!
- 13/04/2002
- 12:49:59
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.