Great structure and good vocabulary! :-)
- 31/08/2005
- 19:59:55
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I really enjoyed reading your essay. It was informative and had a well structured body.
- 19/06/2005
- 23:03:04
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Good ideas in your essay, however, there is not good structure, which is they key to a great essay!
- 19/06/2005
- 22:55:21
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Good essay even though your conclusion is a little bit weak and short!I enjoyed reading it!
- 15/12/2004
- 19:52:39
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
These were argument everybody has read a thousand times - was it that hard to come up with something a little bit different and challenging? What about the emotions of a woman?
- 11/12/2004
- 08:15:16
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Will complaining about homework do anything good for you?Have you ever tried talking to the teachers to get their sympathy?However, I understand your point. There are some teachers that don't understand that you have a life outside of school!
- 11/12/2004
- 08:01:32
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Very fun to read.However, I don't agree with your conclusion. How says that perfection is the ultimate goal? What is perfection?If something is perfect does that mean that no further improvement is necessary? What about evolution?
- 08/12/2004
- 10:15:22
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading your work!You did a good job putting all the facts together. You forgot to mention that Euler produced almost half of his work during his last seventeen years of life - when he was blind.His name is spelled like "oiler" by the way.
- 26/04/2004
- 13:19:27
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Very intruiging to read.Good research work!
- 08/04/2004
- 18:29:19
- Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
A little unclear in the beginning and not very well organized but rich with facts.I guess the grammatical mistakes and the missing structure made the teacher give you the grade you got!?In enjoyed reading it temendously!
- 08/04/2004
- 13:19:02
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
...your teacher gave you that grade because there was too much repetition going on?
- 07/04/2004
- 18:38:19
- Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Factual writting, yet intriguing.I know I love my tailbone! ;-)
- 07/04/2004
- 18:36:48
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
It doesn't surprise me that your grade was 97%. This essay is clearly structured and to the point.Well done!
- 04/04/2004
- 15:15:37
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Auch wenn der Aufbau etwas verwirrend war und einen aeusserst aufmerksamen Leser fordert, finde ich deinen Aufsatz im Gesamtbild ziemlich gut!
- 04/04/2004
- 15:13:02
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
When I was standing in a Lindt Chocolate store one of the sales persons said to her client "European chocolate is superior to American chocolate."I fully agreed! I am from Europe and chocolate is simply better there - even the cheap brands!Also, you have to consider the culture of each country more detailed. France and Belgium both indulge their taste buds. Food is culture and it plays a big role in their lifes. Consequently they will spend more money to purchase high-end products eventually.On the other hand Germans do have a food culture as well but their spendings are in different sectors.A little more depth in your work would probably have given you a better grade.Or what did your teacher comment on your writting?
- 03/04/2004
- 17:01:22
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Well written and informative to read.I find Mr. Juergen E. Schrempp's background interesting. However, it would not have been appropriate to include this in this marvellous paper!
- 03/04/2004
- 13:58:16
- Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
This essay was gripping to read.It would have made it easier to read if your paragraphs were shorter.Also, not only women get raped - men as well!
- 03/04/2004
- 13:41:47
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Interesting work - since I am not pro Bush as well. ;-)Bush did not only spent the surplus, he drove the US into the biggest deficit EVER!Moreover, making countries look bad just because they didn't suit his will - what kind of policy is this?Isn't he supposed to be a leader? Why does he force others to their "best"?Where is his vision? Where is his charisma?
- 27/03/2004
- 08:13:33
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Hey Yuanze Chan,this was wonderful to read. I can't believe how good your English is already.A sequel of your essay would be very fun! ;-)
- 27/03/2004
- 08:05:46
- Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
I am assuming this is a rough draft?The organization of this essay is not at the optimum. The transitions from one paragraph to another are mostly non-existent.This rough draft has very good potential to become an excellent essay!
- 27/03/2004
- 07:51:41
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
The essay's quality would improve imensely if the introduction and conclusion weren't so poor. You are a Junior in college? You can and should be able to do better than this!
- 27/03/2004
- 07:41:47
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Very interesting to read even though there are some major grammatical mistakes.
- 27/03/2004
- 07:34:46
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Dear Cynthia,you could have taken this essay one step further. It is not only the history teachers' and books' fault that students are patriotic and tend to be ignorant. It is a continuous circle within the generations.I am German and guess what I learned in my history class? Quite the opposite. Imagine the situation you described in a different country, e.g. Germany. Which thoughts come to your mind first? Nazi - right!?I am very resentful about the fact that Germans are still ashamed of their country and aren't as patriotic as they should be. Come on - Germany is great!
- 26/03/2004
- 08:29:57
- Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
Your introduction could be better. It does not clarify what your essay discusses. Indirectly you called a miscarriage an ailment - that's horrible!
- 26/03/2004
- 07:55:28
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
Not all leaders are managers, nor are all managers leaders. You did not clarify this difference. What was your teachers comment on your paper?
- 26/03/2004
- 07:50:04
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In my opinion this is not an essay, it is an experience report. How old are you? Have you not thought about the consequences of living with a different person and what kind of difficulties might occur?
- 24/03/2004
- 14:34:14
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
This "essay" should have been a little longer and more detailed.
- 21/03/2004
- 10:59:39
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Emotional Intelligence takes you even further successwise.
- 21/03/2004
- 10:56:59
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
A very helpful essay.Maybe you should have made some suggestions from your own side to prevent kids from watching all the violence.How about some more love shows? ;-)
- 21/03/2004
- 10:14:22
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.