just a warning to anyone reading this essay - it's full of misinformation. there are plently of benefits from the use of artifical sunlight. the first UV lamp was invented in 1906 to to help patients with diseases like ricketts to increase their vitamin D, leading to stronger bones. furthermore, vitamin D deficiency has been linked to over 25 deadly cancers, including ovarian, breast, and prostate. i'd rather tan and eventually have skin cancer removed than to die from breast cancer because i lacked vitamin d. if you are researching this topic - whether pro tanning or against it - make sure you research both sides so you can defend your essay from every angle.
- 27/11/2004
- 11:04:33
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you parallel the stages of the character and what neo went through in the movie very well. i can easily see how it all fits together. however, i would have liked a bigger introduction and (especially) conclusion. the essay just seems to suddenly end, leaving the reader hanging.
- 22/11/2004
- 21:47:09
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some of your sentences run-on for too long. vary the structure of your sentences. it will make the essay easier and more interesting to read.
- 22/11/2004
- 21:33:30
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