What is this? Even though this are facts i don't even understand what the author is trying to tell us here. Focus on your points. When talking about Jovelin, go into details and do a research about him so that readers, will understand what you are writing.
- 06/04/2004
- 13:30:06
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Dear Author, Do you call this an essay? Sounds more like a poem.
- 06/04/2004
- 13:26:16
- Score: 1 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
Dear Author,You bulit up a very good introduction about Job Market today. But you ended pretty soon after mentioning business ethics.May i suggest to you, go into detail of business ethics. What are business ethics? What is the responsibility of each individual? It is really a good introduction. But you put your work into the bin!
- 06/04/2004
- 09:56:29
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Dear Author,An essay suppose to be part of story telling. However, i feel that something is lagging. May i call your essay, A report of IKEA Case Studies?
- 06/04/2004
- 09:46:12
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
I think this essay should not be accepted because this is too short. A good essay should be about at LEAST 800 words and above. Of course, content and proper research should be well extracted from sources and summaries in your own point of view. Somehow, i don't really understand what you are talking about.
- 06/04/2004
- 09:39:21
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
Dear Author,Perhaps you can try to refer depreciation to a specific company where the company starts their capital, invest in certain products and sells them, causing a lose profit in their company. In the "essay" you wrote ( i don't know to call it essay or not.) You are merely defining the meaning of depreciation. Perhaps you should take a case studies from a company and discuss the case, using business models and factors to leverage your points. It will help your work to become an essay instead of a definition of depreciation.
- 06/04/2004
- 09:25:13
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
You quoted, "You don't have to kill each other to make a point about what you believe in." I understand that you are trying to describe religious harmony. I would have wrote, "There is no obligations to different races and cultures to believe in their individual religion." There are alot more grammer mistakes which i can't point out every sentences.Please spell out "#1", to "number one" In essay, you are expected to spell the words out. Moreover, you had a spelling error "with" to "wit". May i suggest to you, to do a quick word document check?Some thoughts from my own point of view. Do you think a very poor family can migrate to U.S. easily? If they already have the cash flow problems, how do they manage to purchase an air-ticket and rent an apartment since expenses are high in the states. State your views.Please do more research before writing an article to support your points. I hope you don't mind my critic against this essay. It's a good try anyway. Please take care!
- 06/04/2004
- 01:04:38
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I think the usage of your english in this essay is relatively poor. Please take note of your sentences. Alot of spelling and grammar mistakes.
- 06/04/2004
- 00:44:50
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
After reading your essay... may i suggest to you, perhaps you can come up with your own conclusion towards the end of the essay and give some thoughts of how you felt towards Marriages for gays. This is quite an interesting topic to talk about and i would have come up with a balance view. For example, Gay marriages should be allow and why, from your own point of view. What are the consequences of gay marriage and to the future world? Is the society going to except this marriages- esp. the religious fellowers?And in another point of view, it should not be approved by the law... Why? What are the future possibilities of low-birth rate in the country as more and more gays get married?I am not a gay, i am a girl but what you have done is more plagiarism.Just my thoughts of your essay. What do you think? Anyway, it is very well extracted from sources.Best regards,Joyce
- 02/04/2004
- 02:00:51
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
Hello to the author of "Mercedes Benz : Competitive forces." You have very good subheading to lead your explaination for Mercedes Benz. Categories well for easy references and English is readable. Well-Done!
- 02/04/2004
- 01:43:41
- Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.