Seems insanely long since you only need to write 600 words in the HSC. Oh well, great stuff.
- 22/07/2005
- 09:22:34
- Score: 0 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
The last paragraph seemed extremely informal for an essay, but perhaps that was the assignment.
- 22/07/2005
- 09:14:30
- Score: 3 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
You consistently spell Skrzynecki's name wrong. The examiners are going to think you never even got as far as reading the title page, which is a shame since the essay is actually good.
- 22/07/2005
- 09:10:10
- Score: 1 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
The content is really impressive but you have to paragraph, it's almost unreadable. Also, it would be a good idea to include 'Arthur Miller' in the title of your essay so it's easier for people to find. Great work though!
- 11/06/2005
- 10:52:28
- Score: 1 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
A little less quotation and a little more information would probably have been a good idea.
- 14/05/2005
- 01:00:01
- Score: 3 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
You repeat the word "epic" too many times, you need to use a thesaurus. Also simply switching around the sentence structure of "possesses the traits of an epic hero" doesn't hide the fact your not actually saying anything new. But it was a fine piece of work.
- 03/02/2005
- 00:07:17
- Score: 1 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
Couple of spelling mistakes: \"habbit\" and \"writting\". I can see why your teachers think you have potential, it flows well. Cheer up, clean up your act, create an environment without distractions (maybe the local library), work to the best of your abilities and move on. Don\'t be afraid that your best isn\'t good enough, you have to take the risk.
- 03/02/2005
- 00:01:55
- Score: 2 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
...Ursula LeGuin?
- 16/07/2004
- 06:59:28
- Score: 1 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
hahah, did you hand that into a teacher? you better watch it, some might consider it an indecent assault. funny though.
- 16/07/2004
- 06:10:24
- Score: 3 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
the formatting is very annoying, but the content is useful.
- 06/07/2004
- 02:53:54
- Score: 3 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
firstly, i need to say that being a new member of cheathouse i was confused by the rating system and i accidentally rated this essay 'average' when i had meant to rate it 'good'. sorry about that.secondly, i enjoyed this paper very much and if had any criticism it would be that the poet's name is repeated too many times. for example in the second line "was a common theme for Dylan Thomas", Thomas' name was already mentioned in the line before. Perhaps an alternative would be "was a common theme in the poet's work" or "his poetry". The repetition just makes it slightly difficult to read.great work though!
- 29/06/2004
- 07:30:02
- Score: 32 out of 40 people found this comment useful.