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  • Grammar...

    I don't know what level this was aimed for but grammar need A LOT of improvement. Fragmented sentences all over the place, commas where they shuldn't be, a lot of sentences are very short something like what a 5th grader would do. Content wise it's ok but still quite disorganised.If I was marking this I'd give it a C-.
    • 25/09/2004
    • 16:08:18
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    Excellent use of imagery, I can practically see my self standing in the candy store. Maybe there should have been a concluding paragraph in stead of jsut a couple of sentences.
    • 25/09/2004
    • 15:59:23
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.