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  • Great Essay

    This essay is very well done, but there is a problem in the first paragraph. A very weak thesis statement. The transition sentences are a bit weak and using "In conclusion" for the conclusion is a very low level way of ending an essay. Overall this essay covers the racism and animal connection very well.
    • 16/01/2005
    • 11:00:58
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.