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All Quiet on the Western Front: How entering war at an early age can change a person.
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How women are protrayed in The Odyssey by Homer.
- 1089 words (4 pages)
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Using examples from "A Lesson Before Dying" (Ernest J. Gaines) and "Thank You, Ma'am" (Langston Hughes) as examples, how do people guide other people to their own empowerment?
- 596 words (2 pages)
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My opinion
This essay was kind of blah for me. I did not see a clear thesis. I was also taught to never write essays in the first or second person so that did not score to high with me either. It did not have a consistant format that i can follow and the arguing topics are common. I do not see any original thought at all and that is what really score the most with me. Overall you have a very interesting topic but this essay is just not my cup of tea.- 26/05/2005
- 20:54:04
- Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
Hints for future
well i think this essay has promise. i don't know a lot about critique essays but i highly advice you to not write essays in the first person. "this is wonderful" is a stronger statement than "i think this is wonderful". i noticed that this is a college essay. the sentence structure is too simple. try to explore more.- 26/05/2005
- 20:46:57
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.