Very well laid out and informative.
- 02/10/2005
- 10:51:11
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
Its the typical cliche played over and over. But you told it very well and I enjoyed reading it. Lets see what happens next.
- 08/07/2005
- 06:50:14
- Score: 18 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed this one. Keep it up
- 05/07/2005
- 12:50:46
- Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
I felt that you could've stretched the story out a little more. Especially in the beginning. Maybe explaining his surroundings a little more, maybe giving a brief history of your vampire. But, your story structure was well executed. I'll read part ii shortly, also hoping that you have fewer grammatical errors.
- 05/07/2005
- 12:40:02
- Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
Your title says it all. Good ending.
- 30/06/2005
- 15:35:11
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I enjoyed reading it. But I feel that not enough was said about the story itself, and even though it can be treated as a teaser for others, I felt a little more could have been said so as to entice your target audience. That said, well done.
- 30/06/2005
- 15:20:09
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.