More evidence in the way of examples statistics would make this alot stronger.
- 02/09/2007
- 18:19:26
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Be mindful only using Wikipedia. As a year 12 student I'm not allowed to hand work in with at least 3 others sources (other than wikipedia) due to the fact it can be edited by members. It isn't exactly reliable.
- 02/09/2007
- 18:15:03
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Your class text book is not enough to write a complete essay. Your teacher should have made you aware of this. Also you've got a slight numeric order in your 1st paragraph. Should read 1917 not 1971 unless u want to refer to ostopolic.
- 02/09/2007
- 18:11:44
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Well done, you've done your research.
- 02/09/2007
- 18:04:53
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Try to be a bit more articulate with your wording, instead of coming out and just agreeing with the question, form a proper introduction thats hods the GNTT theory (general i.e topic in general (Hitler) a Nutshell i.e re ruled 1933 - 1945 with heavily criticized policies, Titles (not required unless using source/texts, Thesis i.e Hitler during his ruling was a success for the Hitler classed "German Citizen" (obviously a non-jew)
- 02/09/2007
- 17:45:19
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Might I suggest looking at more sources than Wikipedia.
- 02/09/2007
- 17:40:37
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Really quite interesting, I like that you gave context about the used it really helps capture the audience and believe what your saying, good job! Hope u got a great mark!
- 01/09/2007
- 23:45:35
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Your introduction needs a little work. It isn't a strong enough thesis. Ideally your intro should have a thesis that allows you to read the essay without knowing the question but be able to know what your setting out to prove before they get to your body paragraphs.
- 01/09/2007
- 21:32:52
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Your essay is very opinionated and holds no real accuracy. In such a case your initial thesis should be worded in a manner to state that your looking at society's interpretation of communication.
- 01/09/2007
- 21:17:28
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This essay is brilliant. Its form and language used is superb. Congrats on writing it!!
- 05/11/2006
- 00:25:32
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This is great. I'm currently doing a debate on this, and its really got my mind thinking... thanks for submitting this!
- 08/03/2006
- 08:52:33
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