This is a wonderfully well-written little application essay! It paints (or builds) a clear picture of the versatility and humanity of the author and at the same time presents command of grammar and great writing style. I've only been on the website a short while but it's certainly the best piece I've read. Good work and best wishes in your academic pursuits!
- 19/09/2005
- 19:39:13
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Well-written essay. Needs a great conclusion and correction of grammatical errors to really make it a strong work. Also, what is BPUPKI?
- 18/09/2005
- 10:28:23
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Good attempt to explain a fairly complicated concept. The second to last paragraph is confusing because it talks about three distinct types of economic systems, and developing countries using a mix of the three. In previous paragraphs there were two distinct types, but stated that all economies were a mix of these two. It is unclear how we got to three. The numerous typos and mixed tense are distracting. The conclusion should also be stronger.
- 18/09/2005
- 10:18:42
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This work seems more to be more of a short answer than a complete essay. The very first sentence paints a gross generalization of rosy relationship between the US, USSR, and the UK during WWII, but in reality tensions existed, especially since FDR trusted Stalin over Churchill. Also, if this is an essay, I can find no clear thesis statement. A thesis should be clearly stated. Errors in the sentence structure and grammar abound. Finally, the essay simply stops without really bringing closure to the nonexistent thesis. The writing shows some promise and shows the potential for a good essay if given some rework.
- 17/09/2005
- 23:18:41
- Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.