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Good but...
Its very good I like how u worded it mostly.. you placed it on paper great from ur head... just a few mistakes thats all spelling (1st paragraph... madder *should be matter*) if you could alter a couple of your sentences that would help too (you had sadder *should be ^more sad^*) other that it was great... fix those problems and u have a good paper... call on me if u want me to help u fix it.- 23/10/2005
- 17:39:51
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Good job.
Good but it would be better if u could have some intext citations... so we know u wrote it.- 23/10/2005
- 16:21:59
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.