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  • Interesting

    It's an essay from a totally unusal standpoint. Good attempt.But the economic gains from the Cold War are repeated. Also, a description of the Vietnam War and the Cuban Missile Crisis is not necessary. The fact that you know what these two were about doesn't add to your point.Other things to consider: The aid given by the superpowers to other countries allowed the development of the industries of many Third World nations, the intense battle between the two powers were in many fronts, including the 'human rights' front leading to a commited effort to improve the human rights within their respective nations to prevent a loss of face, the United Nations increased in strength as the intense tension present in the world increased the need for peace, the technological advances made by the two sides caused many beneficial things such as the start of man's quest in space etc.
    • 09/03/2006
    • 00:53:20
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  • Not enough

    History encompasses all. There are too many reasons that need to be considered to get the whole picture. Check my Origins and Manifestations of the Cold War essay.Things you missed: Personalities of the leaders, presence of the Red Army in Eastern Europe and the subsequent conversion to communism, vacuum of power created by the decline of Europe (i.e. someone had to be the main power in the world, both USSR and US wanted to do this), the refusal of the Western powers in creating a Western Front during the war (Thereby, USSR had to fight Germany all on its own for three years leading to millions of casualties. This could have been easily prevented if the Americans and the British had rushed and attacked the Germans from the west after liberating France which they didn't for quite some while) et al.
    • 09/03/2006
    • 00:42:26
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Not bad.

    Just one note, "With the additional controls in place and the advisement to employees, monitoring of internet activity will increase events like this from happening in the future." I think you mean to say "decrease" instead of "increase".
    • 03/01/2006
    • 01:12:02
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Wad's the point?

    Every essay must have a purpose. This one doesn't exactly seem to have one, does it? If you are going to write a descriptive essay then state so in the introduction. You should also mention what is being done to reduce child abuse and uphold children rights in order to complete the essay.
    • 03/01/2006
    • 01:08:12
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.