This is grammatically poor. This is not university level. This will not get A+. Therefore, you are a liar.
- 16/06/2007
- 17:17:37
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Projects below 500 words IMO are not worth submitting.
- 07/06/2007
- 03:44:25
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What this piece is, I do not know. I admit to the good analysis, but I think you should present the essay in a less personal (less 'I') and more formal tone.
- 07/06/2007
- 03:40:10
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This is quite an unconventional take on Doll's House, which traditionally is seen to be emphasizing the selfishness of Thorvald rather than Nora.
- 07/05/2007
- 23:34:31
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With only 450 words, does this really count as an essay?
- 24/03/2007
- 01:03:11
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If I ever did a paper on Samurai, ur essay would be the first on my reference list. Extremely comprehensive, while easy to understand.
- 16/03/2007
- 23:21:12
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This should be moved to some Asian pop place.
- 16/03/2007
- 23:17:32
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Try harder next time, 350 words does not define an essay.
- 09/03/2007
- 20:02:49
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This should have more wider reading references inserted. I do not believe it will receive an A rating.
- 09/03/2007
- 20:00:03
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This essay is very helpful for those who do public speaking.
- 09/03/2007
- 19:58:00
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The hmm in your writing reduces the persuasive effect. IMO using I suppose would be better.
- 03/03/2007
- 21:33:50
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This line seems a bit weak. However I really like the last 6 lines - they carry a good flow.
- 03/03/2007
- 21:31:20
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Alternative perspectives could be fate & destiny, appearance vs reality.
- 03/03/2007
- 21:12:34
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The style of referencing is effective and aesthetically pleasing.
- 27/02/2007
- 02:20:13
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Thank you for these notes! Also, you might want to note the type of font used in the title, as it adds a sense of mystery through its peculiar colour and shape.
- 25/11/2006
- 17:53:33
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I like the casual tone of your writing. The use of an informal style of writing gives the piece much more persuasive power.
- 10/05/2006
- 22:25:41
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Your arugments on a whole is very persuasive. I think where you lost marks is on the first-person perspective. You need to also support your arguments with textual evidence i.e. give quotes from the text.
- 10/05/2006
- 22:21:43
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1. 'things' is never a good word to use in an essay. Much better words can be found if time was taken to carefully think it out.2. Long quotes are acceptable in essays done at home, but not in exams. When possible, use ellipses "..." to shorten a long quote.3. Try to write the essay in a third person perspective.Good job on the 85%!
- 10/05/2006
- 22:13:13
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Your ideas are very good, but try to make more reference to literary techniques. Here in Australia, analysis is what counts. Congrats to you on your 95% mark :D
- 10/05/2006
- 22:08:01
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Is this an 'explain' type of essay? If it is then you did very well by making clear links between the subject and your argument.
- 10/05/2006
- 22:04:59
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Are you sure your essay was supposed to be written in first-person perspective?"I don't think modern day education would be as advanced as it is today," take out the I don't think bit and it would still have the same effect, but in a (maybe) more appropriate, third person view.
- 10/05/2006
- 22:02:14
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Remember people, essays are about sex. And by sex I mean:S - State your pointE - Example and quoteX - X'plain your argumentGood job SunShine! Your essay is clear and well explained.
- 08/05/2006
- 03:51:51
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