Allthough all the facts are on par, the sentence structure did not vary, there were poor transitions and the opening paragraph did not have a "hook" to grab the reader.Overall a very good essay but not acceptable for anything past 11th grade.
- 26/05/2006
- 09:20:39
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
This essay is very well written and an even pass for a college paper, it flows well with good transitions and is in perfect MLA format.
- 26/05/2006
- 09:11:03
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Although this essay provided many facts it was not written well, this essay is plagued by akward sentence construction and poor grammar.
- 26/05/2006
- 09:08:10
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.