This is a really good essay on capital punishment with many interesting ideals. But try to make your paragraphs a bit shorter.
- 20/07/2006
- 01:17:45
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You have made some very good points within the text, but it is very brief. To make it longer you should maybe compare information received in the text about animal testing, with what is being done with animal testing in your society, which will help you gain more ideas and opinions about the text.
- 19/07/2006
- 05:42:25
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This was good except you should try to keep your paragraphs shorter to make it easier to read.
- 19/07/2006
- 05:23:48
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At the moment your essay is looking more like a report, as essays do not have questions written in that the writer answers later on. Try just answering the questions without stating the question you are answering, to make it look more like an essay rather than a report.
- 19/07/2006
- 00:30:45
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This was a well set out essay and easy to understand, but it is 'exactly' like your other essay on the same subject?
- 19/07/2006
- 00:01:45
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This essay was quite good, except you should remember to put your essay through spell check, eg. as you said "destroys all og her representations" and I suppose the word you were looking for was 'of' instead of 'og'. But dont worry they were only small mistakes and overall it was really well done.
- 18/07/2006
- 23:05:48
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This is a very descriptive piece of work, but I wonder, if you had extra time to do this essay what else would you put in it? As I fail to see there being any room for extra information. It was also great to see that you didn't repeat yourself in any part of the essay.
- 18/07/2006
- 08:17:20
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How can Differentiation strategies not be about pursuing uniqueness for the sake of being different? As to be unique it means to have nothing else like it,ie "to be different", which suggests that being different has a key role of something being unique, so if something is not about being different it cannot be about being unique either, as they are basically the same thing.
- 18/07/2006
- 03:42:24
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This was a really good essay which expresses many different perspectives of the movie 'Forrest Gump', but you should try to always avoid using the word 'I', like you did when you said "I think it is very appropriate that Zemeckis begins his movie with the scene in which...". When you say that you think something in the text it expresses that you are maybe, not quite sure of this point. When you write essays you should always be sure of what you are saying and state it. Never refer to yourself as the first person, but the third person, as it gives off a more informative response, to make the readers believe that what you are saying is correct. k hope that helps you for future essays, ^_^
- 17/07/2006
- 23:14:49
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