This is a really well analyzed and well presented essay and I will probably use it as a basis for one of my own on a similar topic.
- 20/09/2006
- 01:58:38
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That was very well written and very funny well done, very clever how you made it seem as though she where actually a real thing to be analyzed :) :) :)
- 11/09/2006
- 07:05:41
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An interesting point of view and well argued but I think that if there was an education system that catered to individual NEEDS rather than interests that would be more effective, however, like you said it would be inpractical and far to expensive. A very interesing essay.
- 11/09/2006
- 05:05:32
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That was a truly excelent essay and if I could I would give it a higher rating than "good". My favorite point was about the criminals and the 8th amendment, because that is absolutly true. The only thing that I would have liked to see was a more extensive explanation on atlernative punishment. Other than that truly GREAT :)
- 11/09/2006
- 04:53:19
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I dont want to be harsh but this seems to me to be rather poorly written and it also seems to lack a point. It would have made more sense if you had changed the format slighty into one of a news report. It would have been excellent if you had done that(or I think so :-) )
- 11/09/2006
- 04:43:19
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This essay very cleverly plays on feelings and emotions, and is very well written (quite sad actually). It absolutly deserves a title of "perfect" instead of almost perfect:)
- 11/09/2006
- 04:33:43
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This was genarally well written however I think you should have said something about the relationship between secondhand smoke and lung cancer as this is also a major cause. Also watch your senctence construction, because I got the inpresion in the 5th line that the patients had abscess and both these and their lungs where collapsing. But other than that, a very well researched and well presented essay.
- 01/09/2006
- 00:29:23
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I always try to give a positive comment on whatever I read, so this is what I think was good about yours: you seem to have researched the windows O.S. quite extensively and you also you seem to know your facts. However as far as I can tell this essay is meant to be a comparison between Windows and Mac, therefore it needs to be unbiased (which it obviously isnt), if you had entitled it "Why Windows is better than Mac" I would have said that it was perfect. A very well written essay.
- 30/08/2006
- 04:42:33
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In the first two paragraphs I had to think carfully about what you where trying to prove/disprove or what the purpose of the experiment was. But I did realize after the second paragraph, what what you were saying. On the other hand, this is an excellent 'essay' with good structure and logical development and analysis. I actually agree with the result of your experiment as I myself am a drummer and therfore I require seperate motor skills for each arm and each leg so I understand exactly what you are saying:)
- 28/08/2006
- 22:34:20
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I think that it is very well written and provides all the esential info very well, I'm currenty in Gr.11 and we're also doing the Russian Revolution and you have actually succeded in highlighting the facts better than my teacher has/does. My only suggestion would be to put a little bit more detail in about Rastupin and the Petrograd Soviet as they both played very significant roles, but other than that really great
- 28/08/2006
- 02:46:15
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