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  • Religion

    I think any time you discuss religion, you are opening a can of worms. It is easy to understand where this comment would come from. It seems as if you are not yourself a religious person, and that may be why you do not understand the Bible.
    • 29/10/2002
    • 19:42:28
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Transitions

    This paper seems to be well written, with a lot of thought put into it. My suggestion would be to better transition from one paragraph to the next. I would also reccommend that the conclusion be redone.
    • 29/10/2002
    • 19:36:05
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • The Hero's Journey

    I absolutely love this story! It has so many wonderful meanings. A good point is made in this paper regarding vision and clarity. The conclusion seems to be a bit weak, but otherwise I feel that it is a well written paper.
    • 26/10/2002
    • 17:27:15
    • Score: 2 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • The importance of a Thesis

    It is so important, when arguing something, that you have a thesis that is sharp. It cannot be a run-on sentence such as we have here. Although it seems as if the topic was well researched, the information could be better distributed.
    • 26/10/2002
    • 14:30:06
    • Score: 2 out of 3 people found this comment useful.