This is a good essay except that I still don't know whether Yoga is Good or Bad. I haven't got any information to decide either. I think you should have explained what Yoga is, then give the pros and cons. Then the reader would be able to make an informed decision.
- 30/10/2007
- 07:48:42
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This is a good introduction for topic 'Basic structure of the respiratory System'. The information is well structured and it flows logically. Can't wait to read the rest of it.
- 25/10/2007
- 09:21:39
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I hope you don't believe what you have written. There are different religions but they are not the same. You need to understand the text in its context. eg. the eye for an eye, hand for a hand is not God's law, but Moses law. Go to this website for further information. http://news.adventist.org/
- 22/10/2007
- 06:45:51
- Score: 4 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
There is clear evidence that research was done. Very useful and well structured essay. Keep it up!
- 08/10/2007
- 04:29:29
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
Not enough points to support your argument. Fairly good though.
- 09/05/2007
- 15:12:17
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
You have some good points, but I not sure which side you are arguing for. You seem to switch between sides.
- 09/05/2007
- 14:57:55
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Excellent essay! Very good structure. Good job.
- 09/05/2007
- 14:11:32
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Very good essay but you should have used more examples to support your thesis. You could have used more realistic solution to the problem - like getting colleges to teach proper time management or to keep counseling session specifically for internet addictions.Very good essay!
- 28/02/2007
- 05:54:17
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There are few errors in this essay. Eg. You have "The data capacitance of a cd disk is approximately 6 megabyte." you also have "...much smaller than a hard driver." - Its hard drive. I think you could have done more research. There are lot of information on cds and dvds. I didn't like the level of language used. Overall, if I was to grade this essay I would give it a D. Sorry to be so harsh but this is not university quality work.
- 27/02/2007
- 06:13:42
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I like the way you organized the paragraphs. Each paragraph is fully developed and very informative.
- 26/02/2007
- 11:55:58
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
You skipped windows 2000 and windows millennium. You clearly did some research but you don't have any sources. Fairly good essay though.
- 26/02/2007
- 10:05:59
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The paragraphs are not developed fully. If someone is not familiar with computers they won't understand what you are talking about. You need to think about your readers more when you write your essay.
- 26/02/2007
- 10:00:05
- Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
I'm not a big fan of Nintendo DS, but the way you presented the features and the essay over-all, I want one! You could go into the advertising industry! Good essay.
- 26/02/2007
- 09:52:40
- Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
I like the way the information was presented and the language used to explain the concepts. The only con is that it would have been good to compare this operating system to a well know one - such as windows xp.
- 26/02/2007
- 09:46:48
- Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
When I read the paragraphs they seemed liked they weren't related until I read all of the essay. Each paragraph should be connected more smoothly together. However it is good that you had the different elements of a story such as well described: characters, setting, plot and climax. The story line was very good. Keep practicing and try to blend each paragraph into each other. Good Essay!
- 22/02/2007
- 08:05:34
- Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.