Pretty good. There were only a few grammatical errors.
- 16/06/2007
- 23:24:37
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There were inconsistencies, contradictions, and no citations for something that involves facts. In addition to that, it lacked length, thus appearing not well thought out. Aside from that, it's okay.
- 16/06/2007
- 22:52:21
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This was a nice essay. It flowed well and had a clearly stated thesis. Good work.
- 28/05/2007
- 14:59:05
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Because this is a 9th grader's paper, I can't expect much. However, I will say for future improvement that you lack a thesis and your paper is quite disorganized. You also lack a conclusion.
- 28/05/2007
- 14:55:04
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