User Details For: Robert Kestenbaum

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  • Outstanding

    Well written, excellent references and professionally presented in a well thought-out and logical manner.A pleasure to read.
    • 02/04/2003
    • 22:19:07
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs help

    Numerous spelling, grammatical, structural, transitional and organizational errors throughout the paper. I can understand the jist of the paper, but it is difficult to read as it is presented.Needs a major rework before it can be presented as a good paper.Example of poor grammar: 'Since nowadays the band has known many members.'
    • 17/03/2003
    • 14:31:56
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay paper

    A little disorganized in structure and transition. Several sentences are left uncompleted and the thoughts are jumbled.However, the information is interesting and, with some minor tweaking in presentation, could provide an intriguing paper on the history of a great medicinal tradition.
    • 17/03/2003
    • 14:21:38
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    The paper was well written with a smooth transition between points that were made. However, references should be included and cited to lend credence and legitimacy to the paper.Good job.
    • 17/03/2003
    • 10:20:57
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Good, but not great

    The flows tends to be broken up a bit. Ideas jump around without a constant flow or smooth transition between thoughts.Other than that, interesting and well researched.Good job.
    • 12/03/2003
    • 17:02:40
    • Score: 8 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay

    I don't know how many times I've pulled up behind a large Cadillac driving 20 mph below the speed limit and I couldn't see the driver. When I passed it, I would always see some Geritol blue-hair little old lady peering over the steering wheel with coke-bottle-bottom glasses chatting to her friend. Nothing against senior drivers, but there should be measures taken to ensure that they are safe on the road.One point, however, about the hearing test. Requiring good hearing may discriminate against the thousands of good drivers that are legally deaf.Good thought flow, organization and structure. Great paper.
    • 11/03/2003
    • 10:11:02
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Incomplete and unstructured

    Needs some rework throughout the paper. Several ideas are repeated, the structure and flow of ideas is jumpy and the paper seems incomplete. The intent of the paper is never concluded.A decent attempt, but a better job can be done.
    • 11/03/2003
    • 09:51:08
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Good information, however...

    Good information provided, but a heavy reliance on references with very little original input into the paper. Additionally, the paper is very short and incomplete. Additional information regarding Muhammad's full life, how he came to be a prophet, and how his beliefs spawned a major religion in the world.A great reference, even if just to get a background and feel for Islam, is to read the Qu'ran (Koran). There is one English translated version available at www.blackmask.com.Otherwise, a good effort.
    • 10/03/2003
    • 11:14:51
    • Score: 14 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Heavily slanted, okay paper

    Organization and structure was adequate, but not great. However, the biggest problem with the paper is the definite bias towards private school education. A good persuasive paper should provide both positive and negative impacts of public and private education, this one didn't. A good persuasive paper should include facts and statistics to back up points and arguments, this one didn't.An average paper in my opinion. Well deserving of the 71% that was awarded.
    • 10/03/2003
    • 10:51:22
    • Score: 19 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
  • Very humorous

    I loved reading this one. The writing style was informal and humorous, actually bringing out a few chuckles as I remember my childhood pet experiences.The writing style is good, could use some minor touches for cleaning up structure and grammar.Overall, great essay.
    • 07/03/2003
    • 15:51:50
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, excellent research

    Citations and research are excellent, presentation of points, arguments and ideas are well written with a logical flow of structure and organization.Good job.
    • 07/03/2003
    • 13:29:26
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, but take a stand

    Your paper is well written for 8th grade, but it would be more effective if you take a stand on your views, instead of saying that zoos are good and bad.Good job
    • 07/03/2003
    • 10:02:22
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Careful about statements made

    One statement in particular seemed slightly biased based on supposition and not fact: "The fact is no female golfer can compete with the best male golfers in the world." Until Sorenson gets the opportunity to play alongside the best male golfers, making an unqualified statement like this may taint the paper as very slanted against women. As for allowing Kontak to compete in the LPGA tour, you have to understand that the LPGA was created because women weren't allowed to compete against men. The final hope, in a real world, is that, after Sorenson competes at Colonial, it may show that women golfers have raised their competitiveness and may, one day, open the PGA fully to women, thereby creating a situation that the LPGA is no longer needed.Aside from that, the paper was very well written. Good job
    • 07/03/2003
    • 10:00:01
    • Score: 6 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Where's my dictionary

    Now, I may think of myself as somewhat well educated, but I admit that I had to pull out the dictionary for some of the terms used in this essay (bloviating, prolix exegeses, didactic). Tachy, your papers are well written, but there are times when simpler words would be better in describing or portraying your thoughts. However, as a senior level university paper, it is well written and organized. I rated it an average, though, based on my perception of the author intentionally trying to bring in obscure or archaic words throughout the paper. (why not blue-eyed instead of cerulean?)Good job, though.
    • 03/03/2003
    • 18:24:38
    • Score: 10 out of 13 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting

    As a wiccan myself, I appreciate reading an unbiased paper on the faith. I disagree with jman for a requirement of position. Some papers are merely written to provide information, nothing more.Very well written.
    • 02/03/2003
    • 12:33:19
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, however...

    The paper is written well with good presentation of arguments, but I would disagree that the benefits of CFC's outweigh the negative impact on the environment. There are already alternatives that are being utilized in the consumer market, as well as in industries for the replacement of freon and other CFC's. I would recommend a little more research on CFC replacement, as well as the current legislation that would limit the amount of CFC production.Good job, though.
    • 28/02/2003
    • 11:01:27
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written for the age group

    For a 3rd grader, this is a good presentation. The author makes a good effort to present his persuasion to read the book.Good job.
    • 28/02/2003
    • 10:57:30
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good, but needs some tweaking

    Good structure, but could use some clarification and development on certain points that were raised. Also, citation of references used for the statistics and data would lend credence to your paper.A good effort.
    • 28/02/2003
    • 10:47:56
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Poor organization and structure

    Hard to understand, poor structure and organization, underdeveloped.Informative, but needs additional work.
    • 28/02/2003
    • 10:16:15
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay paper

    A weak opening and errors in grammar and organization, but, overall it was an okay paper. Informative and successful in conveying information.Okay.
    • 28/02/2003
    • 10:11:05
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    An intriguing opening to the paper, good presentation of the arguments, well written and a nice wrap-up with a good reference back to the story at the beginning. One recommendation, include references and citations to back up your presentation.Well written.
    • 27/02/2003
    • 10:19:23
    • Score: 8 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting and extremely well written

    I enjoyed reading this paper. The author really brought the reader in with interesting backgrounds, facts and presentations.Excellent job.
    • 26/02/2003
    • 18:31:48
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Comment

    The author is definitely passionate about his/her stance on abortion, but the arguments presented were based on emotion and not fact. Several other alternatives were presented in the comments, such as instances for rape or harm to the mother. From my standpoint and personal experience, my wife and I had a difficult decision to make when we were presented with the news that our first child had a condition called infantile polycystic kidney syndrome. This meant that my son would be born with either severely underdeveloped lungs or no lungs at all, a dysfunctional kidney, heart problems and other difficulties that presented a zero (I repeat zero, not minimal) chance of survival after birth. Additionally, carrying my son to full term would also place the health of my wife in great danger. We chose to terminate early through inducing labor after 24 weeks. I'm interested to hear what viewpoints the pro-lifers would say in this case when a wanted child had absolutely no chance of survival after birth with additional health complications and the possibility of no future pregnancies for my wife if she carried full term.My viewpoint, and I welcome criticism for this, is that it is a woman's choice for her body. This does not mean that she should indiscriminately abort a child on a whim. But, if circumstances such as rape, incest, drug abuse, or danger to the mother and/or child, are present, then the mother should have the option to abort. True, a human life is valuable, but so is dignity and a proper upbringing in a loving and caring home.
    • 26/02/2003
    • 10:51:37
    • Score: 49 out of 52 people found this comment useful.
  • Far from convincing

    The author was definitely passionate about the subject, but his choice of presenting the arguments, as well as the references cited, were far from convincing.As for finding facts to support the non-moon landing theory, the Israeli connection to 9/11 or any other outrageous conspiracy theory, one would only have to browse the internet and find facts to support their arguments. In five minutes, I found pages that presented the following: Elvis and Jim Morrison are still alive under government protection, the holocaust never happened, and other theories.Be careful when choosing references to ensure that the material is relevent, unbiased and accurate.I giving you a good for the effort that you put into this paper.
    • 25/02/2003
    • 23:20:46
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Another outstanding paper by swelch

    Swelch has demonstrated, again, an excellent paper through perfect grammar, citation and argument presentation. The points are well stated, informative, and backed up with sound references that allow the reader to conduct further research on the topic if so inclined.Outstanding.
    • 24/02/2003
    • 10:38:07
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Comments and note to kampfer

    First of all, an excellently written and researched paper. The information was presented in a professional manner without any errors in grammar, organization or structure.Note to kampfer: It is not considered stolen if the author cited the reference properly during the paper, as vsbraun did throughout. Properly citing and referencing a source is not theft, failing to do so is considered plagiarism.
    • 20/02/2003
    • 10:22:16
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Weak arguments

    I'm way beyond any age that would really care, but, having read this, I am still not persuaded by your arguments. Instead of trying to use the argument of "hey, if we make it legal, kids won't be breaking the law anymore", try something that makes sense. When you turn 18, you are given the responsibility to vote, work, provide for a family if you choose to have one that young, pay taxes and fight and die for your government in the military. If young men and women are given the responsibility of carrying weapons and handling million dollar pieces of equipment, why not let them have a beer or two.My thoughts.
    • 17/02/2003
    • 11:02:21
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Short and concise

    Well written in very few words. Accurately describes the basic essentials of marketing without loading up with excess material that, for this paper, wasn't necessary. A good primer.Good job.
    • 13/02/2003
    • 18:54:56
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Brief, but covers the basics

    The paper is brief and concise with very few grammatical errors. A conclusion to draw it to a close without deciding upon the issue either way would have greatly enhanced the essay.Well done in presenting the emotional arguments used by both sides of the argument.Good job.
    • 13/02/2003
    • 18:47:23
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    Even though I may not necessarily agree with the debate about war with Iraq, I found that this paper was excellent in presenting evidence and solid facts to back up the different points being made. The author presented his material in a sound, professional and logical manner in a very persuasive style, with excellent references to support his arguments.Outstanding.
    • 13/02/2003
    • 16:15:49
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellently written

    To take on a topic about something that has befuddled man (and woman) kind for centuries is a difficult task. Transitions are smooth, the points are well made and the paper is free of normal errors. A pleasure to read. Well done.
    • 06/02/2003
    • 16:28:32
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Disagree with changing fairy tales

    First off, the essay was written very well with good points. However, I must disagree with the point being made. Fairy tales were written in a different time and passed down, in some cases, over a few centuries. To change the content to appeal to the modern sense of morality would be comparable to changing Mark Twain's Huckleberry Finn because of the use of racist words (acceptable and common practice at the time the book was written, an implorable evil today) or, for a true extreme, changing the wording of the bible because of the elements of murder, war, theft, adultery, slavery or whatnot. It is the parents' responsibility to ensure that, when they read to their children, they choose wisely and sensibly, taking into account the age and maturity of the children. My son is 3, he has yet to be told the various stories by Grimm. That is a choice that is reasonable, changing the stories themselves is not.'nuf said.
    • 05/02/2003
    • 10:42:19
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good points

    You've touched upon a subject that I dealt with almost 12 years ago. After losing my first wife and child to a car accident, many religious people told me that it was God's will and God's plan. I grew angry and lost faith. Your arguments are well presented, with a good flow.Quick comment: 'would of' should actually be 'would have'.Well done.
    • 28/01/2003
    • 10:09:40
    • Score: 5 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Many errors

    Aside from the fact that this is a duplicated paper, there are many organizational, sentence structure, spelling and grammatical errors throughout the essay. Needs some revision.Okay
    • 27/01/2003
    • 11:58:14
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    I may not agree with the conspiracy theory or the arguments used, but you did an excellent job in presenting your point. Well referenced, with an organized flow throughout the paper.Good job.
    • 27/01/2003
    • 10:12:47
    • Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    Very descriptive and heart-warming. You seem to capture the scene with perfect clarity as if the reader can actually see the picture or, in some cases, as if the reader was actually there at the time the picture was taken.Great paper.
    • 27/01/2003
    • 09:59:43
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Very interesting

    A very interesting and well presented history of evolutionism. References were outstanding. A few minor punctuation errors, but not enough to detract from the paper.Outstanding.
    • 23/01/2003
    • 14:03:14
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Good report

    A good review of a classic book. However, there are some major grammatical, punctuation and sentence structure errors that need to be corrected. With these detracting from the overall paper, it was slightly difficult to read.Good, but not great.
    • 23/01/2003
    • 13:57:39
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Inflammatory but interesting

    Some good points are made, but some of the generalized statements may be a tad inflammatory. Might want to watch for that in the future. A couple of sentence structure errors, but, overall it is a good paper.Well done.
    • 23/01/2003
    • 13:51:57
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Another outstanding paper

    This one is very informative with evidence of extensive research behind the paper. Organization and transitions are perfect.Again, one small recommendation would be to include references.Excellent.
    • 23/01/2003
    • 13:49:44
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Very informative

    Well written with excellent transitions between the points being made. One small recommendation, if possible: Include references.Other than that, an outstanding paper.
    • 23/01/2003
    • 13:48:16
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Incomplete and rushed

    The paper was very rushed and incomplete. Organization of ideas and sentence structure need help.(Side comment, it doesn't help the paper or the author when the author comments on his own paper and send raters annoying emails when they don't rate the paper good)
    • 23/01/2003
    • 11:47:58
    • Score: 4 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Good read with few errors

    An interesting paper with few structure and organizational errors. Great research and references.Well done.
    • 22/01/2003
    • 12:07:13
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Good job for the education level

    For 3rd grade, this is very creative and thoughtful. This author, if he continues to explore his creativity in writing, may have great potential.Wonderful.
    • 22/01/2003
    • 12:02:09
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Another outstanding paper

    Again, outstanding references, well written with arguments presented in a professional manner.Good job.
    • 21/01/2003
    • 10:46:15
    • Score: 20 out of 21 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    Well referenced with excellent examples from the workplace. Paper flowed with good transitions from one point to the next.Good Job.
    • 21/01/2003
    • 10:40:10
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    An excellent comparison between Pham's work and the author's own personal experiences. Well written.
    • 20/01/2003
    • 11:54:31
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs some help

    It is true that Nazis created the "Nazi" camps. However, the idea of concentration camps date further back. Russia, Japan, China, even the United States had one form of concentration camp or another. What distinguishes the German camps from the others was the extensive and horrific executions that took place in the camps.The paper was admittedly brief, but it does not do justice to the tragedies that took place. Sentence structure and organization can use some help, it tends to jump around and leave some topics open.Okay
    • 20/01/2003
    • 10:26:01
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Very informative, thanks

    As a Gulf War veteran, I have suffered from occasional short term memory loss, debilitating migraine headaches, nerve pain in my left left, and a burning rash on my face. I am currently being treated at the VA for these items.Your paper is very informative and helpful.Outstanding.
    • 20/01/2003
    • 10:08:04
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Broad, generalized statements, but good

    I had the opportunity for 3 years to work with the various police departments in Los Angeles County as a private contractor to clean up methamphetamine labs after a bust. After 3 years of hard work (which I participated in over 300 lab cleanups), the price of meth went up over 500% due to the dwindling supply. On the flip side, crime only rose a small percentage in the areas affected.Having said that, your arguments are well stated, but you must be careful of making broad, generalized statements that cannot be backed up by referenced facts.A few grammatical, organizational and sentence structure errors, but overall, it was pretty good.
    • 17/01/2003
    • 15:05:04
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting analysis

    Definitely a lot of thought and research went into writing this paper. A couple of facts are confused, but, for the most part, everything is okay. A lot of sentence structure and grammar errors that need to be cleaned up.Good job.
    • 17/01/2003
    • 14:57:18
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Very creative

    Interesting and very creative. Descriptive language and wording is well done. Needs some corrections for sentence structure, grammar and spelling, but they are minor.Well done.
    • 17/01/2003
    • 11:47:00
    • Score: 3 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    One of the better papers that I've read. Very informative with excellent references, almost perfect structure, grammar, etc.Excellent.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 18:38:58
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • You got a 69% on this?

    To be honest, I believe you were robbed for your grade. This paper, in my opinion, is outstanding. The abstract was informative, references were cited to back up facts, sentence structure, grammar, etc. were right on.Excellent.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 14:34:49
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Short, but to the point

    Very brief, but informative for a background and perspective on interest groups.Good job.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 14:30:38
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Try telling the military that

    Coming from a military background where you were told that if you weren't early, you were late, I have some difficulty agreeing. Aside from that, your arguments are well stated, if somewhat brief.Well written.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 11:00:59
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Almost there

    A little brief to explain a tragedy that did change the course of American policy towards terrorism. You are right when you state that everyone will remember where they were when the Towers fell. It joins a terrible list that includes the Challenger explosion (showing my age here), John Lennon and Elvis's deaths (okay, really showing my age), JFK's assassination (okay, I'm not THAT old yet), and so on.Good paper, but can use some help with sentence structure. Good effort.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 10:56:56
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written for all 3 essays

    At first, I was confused when the paper went from death penalty to gangs to relationships. Then, realizing that the essays were combined, I reread each one for content.Death penalty - I disagree with your argument, but I applaud you for taking on a very controversial issue. You've taken into account a few of the opposing points in your paper, but you missed a vital one; the viewpoint of the victim and the victim's family.The paper was well written and presented in an outstanding manner.Gangs - Very informative on the history of American gangs. One hint, include references to back up your facts, if possible. Well written.Relationships - A very in depth look at relationships (as if any guy can understand them. If so, please pass on the secrets). Well written.
    • 16/01/2003
    • 10:39:51
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Good recap, but needs some corrections

    Good recap of the novel, however, the sentence structure and grammar could use some polishing. Potential exists to make this an even better essay.Good job.
    • 15/01/2003
    • 16:17:38
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Very good

    After reading this, I'm interested in picking up "Ordinary People" to read up on the lives of Beth, Cal and Con. I like how the creativity flows, bringing simple, mundane things into focus. Excellent grammar, sentence structure, spelling, etc.Excellent.
    • 15/01/2003
    • 16:13:10
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    Being a veteran of both the Gulf War (fought to remove Iraq from Kuwait and protect American interests in foreign oil) and the Bosnian conflict (fought to protect Muslims from genocide and to ensure a ceasefire on both sides), I find your analysis interesting. You have taken into account the various arguments both for and against war and presented them in a presentable manner. Sentence structure and grammar are good, with very few spelling errors.Well done.
    • 15/01/2003
    • 16:03:01
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done in my opinion

    For an 8th grader to conduct this level of research and portray the facts in an organized, linear fashion, with references cited to back up the facts, is incredible. The sentence structure, grammar and presentation is excellent. Well done.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 17:12:50
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Very informative

    Outstanding research is evident. The arguments are well presented in a strong, professional manner. The only thing missing is the references that are cited. After reading this, I am interested in reading further on this subject.Excellent.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 15:23:19
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Alright

    The information is backed by solid facts, however, a few recommendations.Sentence structure and organization make this paper a little choppy and difficult to read. Some expansion on several ideas is recommended to draw the reader in even further. Asylum7830 had it right to also include an introduction and symptons, but a wrap-up conclusion is also recommended.Overall, it's a good paper with potential.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 13:32:51
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent review

    While reading this, I actually pulled up an image of Le Cypres (or Cypress Trees) to compare the review to the actual painting. The author seems to hit the painting dead on, accurately describing the emotions and feelings that are evoked while viewing the painting.Well done.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 13:28:00
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Great facts

    The information is presented in an orderly fashion with plenty of facts. However, pay close attention to punctuation and sentence structure. Aside from that, well written.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 13:18:43
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Outstanding research, excellently stated, great referencing of facts to back up arguments. This is an outstanding paper.
    • 14/01/2003
    • 13:14:34
    • Score: 9 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting, but I must disagree

    As a native American, I must disagree with many of the points made in this paper.First, the Cherokee nation had, at the time, many advances in writing, philosophy and education. Had they been allowed to progress without European involvement, I do not believe that we would be "living in extremely crowded, filthy, disgusting places for the duration of our lives." That, I feel, is a generalization based on suppositions and not fact.Second, the "paltry uprisings" were as a result of broken treaties and other atrocities that were visited upon the Native Americans by the Europeans and colonists as they drove the different tribes into lands that were uninhabitable due to a hunger for gold, timber, oil and land. For further information on this, read up on The Trail of Tears or Wounded Knee.Overall, the paper is well written in regards to spelling, grammar and sentence structure, but I disagree wholeheartedly with the conclusions that were drawn.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 18:59:01
    • Score: 4 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Good points

    Even though Huck Finn may seem inflammatory through its use of language, it is still a vital part of American literary culture. Many novels are written to portray the thought processes and accepted practices of the time period that is being protrayed. Even the Bible has several references to the acceptance of slavery, an accepted practice at the time.In order for today's students to fully understand their past and not repeat the same mistakes as the previous generations.Well done.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 18:43:44
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    Facts are presented in a professional manner, good points are provided to back up arguments and the content is exceptional taking into account the grade level that this is written for.Very informative, I enjoyed reading it.Well done.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 18:34:16
    • Score: 7 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Needs more substance

    I can understand the thread of thought that the author is trying to convey, however, more substance is needed to express the ideas in a fuller and more cohesive style. A good start.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 16:33:33
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding

    The arguments are well presented with outstanding references and sound points made. Opposing arguments are addressed and discussed, with pros and cons taken for all sides. The majority of the paper is written without any bias or slant, presenting a neutral basis of fact until the end, where the author presents his views, backed up by sound points for persuasion.On the content side, the paper is grammatically correct, very little spelling or sentence structure errors. One paragraph is rather long (#8) and could use breaking up into two or three different paragraphs.An outstanding paper.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 14:24:54
    • Score: 10 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    A well thought out and defined comparison and study. Facts and examples, as well as supporting references, are well presented.Excellent.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 13:48:28
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • What are the questions?

    Sometimes, it's understandable that people submit answers to textbook or classroom questions as an essay to be graded. However, for the readers that do not have access to the questions, the paper is meaningless. In the future, include the questions so others can have a solid base for determining if this is a good essay. Additionally, by reading the questions, the readers can provide greater constructive feedback on your answers.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 13:42:11
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Different

    As an holistic essay, it is definitely on the disturbing and controversial side. However, it is well written and raises some interesting points. Well done.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 13:30:07
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Excellent

    A very interesting paper with an abundance of pertinent information and well presented. I liked reading this one. One comment, references. For any paper to fully achieve its goal for persuasion or information, references will go far.Well done.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 12:59:36
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Good paper

    Great information, well presented. However, the sentence structure and punctuation could use some work. Aside from that, I liked reading this paper.Well done.
    • 13/01/2003
    • 12:48:16
    • Score: 9 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • A few problems

    Interesting historical aspect of abortion in the UK. However, there are quite a few grammatical, sentence structure, organizational and spelling errors. The conclusion ends rather abruptly without bringing the argument to a close. Overall, the paper needs some rework. The idea is coming across, but not quite there.
    • 08/01/2003
    • 15:08:04
    • Score: 13 out of 14 people found this comment useful.
  • Straight to the point

    Full of factual information that is well referenced and presented. The timeline flows smoothly as the author presents the history of the different parties. Interesting and well written.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 15:13:21
    • Score: 5 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay

    Full of facts regarding this tragic accident. However, it felt rushed with items left out. What happened to the three who went out to search for rescuers? Overall, it is an okay paper. Honestly, not your best effort compared to your other papers.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 14:56:07
    • Score: 21 out of 27 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting essay

    This is an interesting essay with a lot of information regarding the psycotropic effects of MDMA, but it fails to discuss the potential physical harm that comes from using a mind altering substance. The paper is highly biased towards the use of MDMA with anecdotes that discuss religious experiences. Aside from the obvious slant towards the drug, the paper is well written (even though a couple of paragraphs are repeated, probably due to copying errors). References would help in supporting the arguments. Well done.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 12:33:36
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written

    The points are presented in a straight forward manner with evidence to support the thesis and arguments. The conclusion could use a little polishing and references would help support the arguments. Overall, well done.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 11:05:40
    • Score: 5 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Hmmm

    At first, I thought this was just an advertisement for a radio station. Then, I realized that the assignment was probably an advertisement for a radio station. Still not sure. However, the author is successful in presenting an interesting plug for this station.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 11:01:34
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Wow

    Interesting and through-provocative. I like the anthropomorphic description of the sea. It actually creates a feeling of a living, thinking entity within the water. Well done
    • 06/01/2003
    • 10:55:50
    • Score: 6 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Point Taken

    AOE-Your point is well taken. I wasn't aware that references sometimes drop after they are transferred.Hokki -I am honestly shocked that this didn't get higher than 96%. This paper is extremely well written, even for an upper-level division at a university. A lot of work went into this paper and it shows. My hat is off to you.
    • 06/01/2003
    • 09:50:38
    • Score: 15 out of 15 people found this comment useful.
  • A few questions and comments

    I have a few questions and comments about this paper to understand the point.Who is the originator of the quote that is used as the title, opening line and first line of the conclusion?Based on the main point, which I assume to be a discussion on how authors are prone to discuss the evils of society more than the good, I am curious about the choice of novels used as a reference point for the essay.Finally, the conclusion does very little to draw the argument to a close or persuade the audience to agree with the viewpoint of the author.An okay paper.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:54:33
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • A great effort with lots of information

    After reading this paper, one could actually believe that human colonization of Mars is possible within the next few years. An extrodinary amount of research and information is presented in a professional manner. Now for the constructive comments:Within the paper, it would be very helpful to properly cite the references to avoid any accusations of plagiarism. The references are provided at the end (in the comments), which is a plus.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:33:56
    • Score: 16 out of 16 people found this comment useful.
  • Too short and bare

    I really don't believe three paragraphs do justice to describe Thoreau's views of life in Walden. A majority of the essay is referencing directly from the novel without an in depth explanation of why the quote was chosen and the importance of the quote within the paper. A good first effort, but more is required.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:27:15
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Good presentation

    As a presentation, I can imagine that it went well. Some very interesting points are raised regarding Descartes. I do like how the author first quoted Descartes (including his most famous line), then went on to explain the quote. Well done.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:16:18
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • This is a first for me

    Having read Emerson and listened to Cat Stevens while growing up, I never thought about a connection between the two until now. The writer raises very interesting points that makes me want to revisit both the book and the song to see for myself the similarities. Good writing style, interesting topic, and great referencing. Well done.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:10:54
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done, but a few comments

    The paper is well written with great references to both novels. I have a couple of comments, though, that should help.The third paragraph, though very descriptive of the age that Huxley chooses to describe, does little to bring to light the satirical method used by Huxley and how it is better than the facutal style used by Remarque.The fourth paragraph is rather long and rambling towards the middle. Breaking it up into two paragraphs will help the reader in focusing on important points of the paragraph.Overall, a well written essay.
    • 05/01/2003
    • 14:02:38
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, but a few comments

    This essay is well written, but the 3rd sentence of the opening paragraph: " I find it extreamly irritating that I may not get into a college that I am completely qualified for because some nitwit who barely passed high school is the 'right' minority" may be a little too inflammatory and emotional for some readers. Other than this slight faux pas (nitwit?), the paper is well written with good points made. The author even addressed several opposition arguments while making his case. Well done.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 18:26:53
    • Score: 10 out of 10 people found this comment useful.
  • Disturbing, but thought provocative

    The title was misleading, since I was looking for more references to Ishmael throughout the paper. The topic is interesting and raises some valid points. The arguments are presented in a professional manner, but they can use some factual information to help in persuading the audience towards the viewpoint presented. Okay.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 10:37:39
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    I don't necessarily agree with the arguments presented against cloning on a religious basis, but the means in which the author presented his case was well thought out and structured. He avoided blatant generalities and presented material, although definitely biased, in a reasonable and professional manner. Well done.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 10:30:57
    • Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.
  • Almost there

    I can see where the author is trying to take his audience in the essay, but the run-on sentences, poor grammar and lack of structure throughout the paper made it difficult to read. The facts were well presented (references should be included), so it is evident that extensive research was conducted. The paper has potential if the author tries again after reviewing some writing aids to clean up the rambling sentences and choppy structure. Okay.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 10:23:55
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Well done

    Very factual with evidence of a lot of research conducted to compose this essay. However, the inclusion of references will help tremendously in proving the factuality of the arguments presented to make the case. Unfortunately, the paper seems to have been stopped rather abruptly, which is a shame. The style and material presented made me want to read the rest of the paper to see where it was going. Well done.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 10:15:17
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Short and to the point

    Very short and to the point. However, breaking the paper up into paragraph form with some additional details to flesh it out may make this a very good paper instead of okay. I like the straight forward approach taken here to present the history behind a mystical and profound religion. Well done.
    • 03/01/2003
    • 10:03:25
    • Score: 4 out of 4 people found this comment useful.
  • Confusing

    As the paper started off, I was expecting to read an indepth definition and examples of hypocrisy and how it should be used. However, reading the conclusion is confusion. At no point during the paper did the writer discuss changing personal behavior for hypocrisy, only how hypocrisy is evident in certain behaviors. The conclusion does not match with the rest of the paper and lends to credence to the argument.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 17:40:01
    • Score: 5 out of 5 people found this comment useful.
  • Choppy, difficult to read

    The writer tends to jump from point to point, never fleshing out any details for points that are raised about the book. The sentence structure is choppy and incoherent. Additionally, the writer focuses more on his feelings about the book instead of presenting the facts of the book itself. After reading this, I really don't know any good reason to pick up "A Separate Peace".
    • 02/01/2003
    • 16:40:25
    • Score: 37 out of 38 people found this comment useful.
  • Apologize for the poor

    I had accidentally hit poor instead of good for this paper. I found that the arguments were stated well. References would be helpful to better backup the facts, if available.again, sorry for the poor, hit the wrong face.Robert
    • 02/01/2003
    • 16:30:54
    • Score: 6 out of 6 people found this comment useful.
  • I disagree with masterpuppet on this paper

    I find that this paper is emotionally charged from the start, with very little references to back up the arguments that are presented. Instead of presenting a persuasive case, the writer starts of by making the reader feel uncomfortable and proceeds to barrage the reader with harsh, emotional arguments that are biased, without presenting any arguments from the opposition. Additionally, the paper ends rather abruptly.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 16:11:55
    • Score: 11 out of 11 people found this comment useful.
  • Interesting

    I agree with the fact that drinking should be lowered to 18 for adults for some points. Having served in the military, I can empathize with the 18 year olds that are called upon to serve their country, yet are denied the right to drink. However, having said that, I don't agree with the arguments that are used to persuade the audience to lower the drinking age. The points that are raised are generalized, emotionally charged, and, in some cases, full of fallacies that take away from the argument as a whole. Additionally, the initial statements about the government making "the wrong choice along with capitalism" starts the essay with a highly charged and slanted view, which may turn off readers and prevent the purpose of the essay, persuading others to lower the drinking age.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 15:56:40
    • Score: 6 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Outstanding and informative

    Well written, to the point, with excellent references cited to provide a firm foundation for the argument.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 15:08:01
    • Score: 16 out of 19 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, highly informative

    The title was misleading, as I was expecting something far different. However, upon reading the essay, I was impressed with the way that the information was presented in a straight forward manner. It is evident that the writer has conducted some research on the subject before writing the essay. Well done.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 14:53:34
    • Score: 12 out of 12 people found this comment useful.
  • Nice paper

    Well written, but I think that, by including specific historical references or events that are left out of history books may have a greater impact for the paper. As it stands right now, the paper presents a broad, generalized picture without specific facts to back up the arguments.
    • 02/01/2003
    • 14:43:49
    • Score: 31 out of 32 people found this comment useful.
  • Okay essay, but references?

    Quick note for writing essays if you want your arguments to come across as objective and rational: include references whenever you cite statistics or facts that are not normally known among the general populace. Another issue that needs addressing is grammar. There are several grammatical errors throughout the essay. Overall, it's an okay essay.
    • 01/01/2003
    • 12:54:19
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Well written, but disappointing in the end

    An excellent paper, but the final conclusion that a Christian "though, has compassion for people" tends to defeat the purpose of the entire paper by implying that only Christians, through reading the bible, are capable of seeing through racism, sexism, classism or any other -ism. This implication is, in itself, a form of bias and prejudice, and takes away from the rest of the paper. The facts are well presented, the arguments are sound, but the conclusion is disturbing. It throws out the rest of the paper in a weak fallacy by presenting only a Christian viewpoint when others may also present a valid argument for fighting 'ism's. Other than that, I applaud you for bringing up points that affect our society today.
    • 31/12/2002
    • 15:09:39
    • Score: 7 out of 7 people found this comment useful.
  • Good essay, but what about references

    A well written essay for the education level presented, but it needs references to support the facts. Additionally, further research should be conducted to answer several questions that were raised (how many parents smoke). Another point, the generalizations made tend to suggest a lack of research in some of the points made. Finally, appeals to emotion don't always lead to a convincing or persuasive argument without the facts to back them up.
    • 31/12/2002
    • 01:02:27
    • Score: 8 out of 9 people found this comment useful.
  • Been there, witnessed the horror first hand

    As a veteran of the Bosnian conflict and having witnessed the devastating and horrific events that a genocidal tyrant thrust upon a people, I can relate to this paper and the facts presented. Well written.
    • 30/12/2002
    • 21:05:48
    • Score: 48 out of 52 people found this comment useful.