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  • Well done

    An excellently written and very insightful essay. A truly analytical piece, which makes a nice change from the swarms of pedestrian textual analyzes which deluge this database.
    • 20/10/2007
    • 03:22:05
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • Not bad for a high school essay

    Certainly lacking depth and sophistication, but this is not a bad effort for 9th grade.
    • 20/10/2007
    • 03:16:58
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Brief, but well written

    This could have been the basis from a fairy interesting historio-theological argument. However it was really too brief to achieve that.It is very well written however, and does raise an interesting notion, albeit in a manner slightly lacking in sophistication.A few points:*One should steer away from prefacing a sentence with "I find...." "it seems....." and other similarly subjectivist claims. That's not to say scholarship is free of opinion-- far from it-- the key is that academics learn to phrase their opinion in a clever, academically legitimate way.*'"true" Christians' was highly problematic for me.. it was in the first sentence and really tainted my opinion of the essay immediately. Perhaps "devout" would have a better choice of word.*Finally, re. 'I do not think Christ and/or God would have wanted their followers to be tortured willingly': One should avoid speculating about what God/Jesus wants.... Perhaps a better way of making that point would be to begin by begin by making the comparison of willing martyrdom and suicide and then demonstrating the Christian doctrine prohibits suicide by quoting relevant bible passage. The thing about religious scholarship is that one can't make an argument by speculating about what God may or may not want.. one must rely on religious texts to make their case.
    • 14/10/2007
    • 17:03:57
    • Score: 1 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • An incredible waste of time..

    How on earth would this even begin to qualify as a college essay? I'm really starting to become concerned about the state of American tertiary institutions if this is the kind of drivel that would suffice as a piece of academic work.Just a quick question: are you perhaps mildly retarded? Because if you are then I retract the previous statement and say "good work" while patting you reassuringly on the head. If you're not then I'll reiterate: DROP OUT OF COLLEGE NOW AND STOP WASTING YOUR PARENTS MONEY.
    • 14/10/2007
    • 16:45:19
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Unsophisticated.

    Perhaps the writer should go back to high school and learn how to sculpt prose. This essay is clumsy and utterly devoid of eloquence.That's not even mentioning the numerous spelling, grammatical and typing errors:"coasts a bunch of money""it is very easily to get lost in a subject, and that's where good noted comes in""which is very easily to understand""I think if you combine some things in college to some things in high school..".....and the rest.....Is this really the standard expected from US college students??? How "verily" depressing.
    • 11/10/2007
    • 17:15:12
    • Score: 3 out of 3 people found this comment useful.
  • Eloquent and insightful.

    Extremely well-written. A highly articulate and sophisticated character/thematic analysis. The essay could have perhaps benefited from some additional textual analysis, but nevertheless, an extremely impressive essay.
    • 11/10/2007
    • 17:01:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.
  • Commendable.

    A generally well written and focused essay. There are a number of grammatical errors and the writer doesn't seem able to recognize a run-on-sentence; but for the most part, a clear and impressive essay. Would benefit from some minor editing, in regards to the aforementioned grammatical errors as well as few poorly chosen words.From a research point of view, there is an over dependence of electronic resources (which incidentally have not been properly cited). Perhaps college students could try picking up a book once in a while?
    • 11/10/2007
    • 16:56:09
    • Score: 0 out of 1 people found this comment useful.
  • Slightly lacking in depth...

    This essay was enjoyable to read as it is well written and eloquent. However it is seemingly lacking a little in analytical depth. You've surveyed the socio-historical context, but you've failed to make an argument to accompany.If this is intended as a high school essay then perhaps it would be almost adequate, but as an undergraduate essay, it is lacking in sophistication.Moreover, you have also failed to list your sources, and provide in-text citations.
    • 11/10/2007
    • 16:41:17
    • Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
  • HAS NOT BEEN PROOFREAD

    The essay requires serious editing and reformatting. The writer has clearly not read the text before submitting it. Sources are unlisted and in-text citations are inadequate.Please reject this essay.
    • 11/10/2007
    • 16:09:47
    • Score: 0 out of 0 people found this comment useful.