Is there a bibliography to all the references?
- 18/04/2008
- 00:58:43
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The use of first person in an essay that does not require your opinion is awkward and likely to lose marks. Also your paragraphs seem too short and combined with a retelling of the story makes your writing unsophisticated and lacking depth.
- 11/04/2008
- 16:30:27
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Good integration of ideas, quotes and techniques to make a sustaining essay. However, it is slightly verbose, making it unlikely to be finished in a 40 min essay.
- 11/04/2008
- 16:27:44
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Slightly generic, with no in-depth analysis of the issues raised. Okay as an introduction to "Australian-ness".
- 11/04/2008
- 00:28:00
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