I felt the arguments were well-articulated, and you covered all the majors issues. Further, you seems to have a clear argument, as well as decent sources. I suggest using more sources, and perhaps annotated them in the future.
- 19/05/2008
- 15:43:41
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For a college undergraduate paper, I felt this essay did lack somewhat; however, for the most part it follows proper structure and has a firm and strong stance on the issue. I would highly suggest making the title more specific and clear, as well as interesting and original.
- 19/05/2008
- 15:41:51
- Score: 2 out of 2 people found this comment useful.
I thought this was a wonderful essay. It followed proper structure, and all arguments were backed up with proper quotes and statistics from creditable sources. Further, you accurately sourced all information.
- 19/05/2008
- 15:33:33
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Although this was a decent attempt at an essay, this isn't one. First, it doesn't follow proper essay structure; second, the three arguments (even if you followed proper essay structure) are far too short; third, this does not meet college standards; fourth, as many people have stated: "wikipedia is not a reliable source."
- 18/05/2008
- 22:36:21
- Score: 8 out of 8 people found this comment useful.