This is a good idea and an interesting analysis of the subject, but I would advise proof-reading your writing for simple grammar and spelling mistakes. Also, i'm quite saddened by your lost interest in this incredible sport.
- 20/01/2009
- 11:43:08
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That was exciting...I only have two friendly criticisms. One is that the whole thing seemed a bit rushed. Take some more time to let the thing play out..describe the atmosphere, the goals, and the tension. Secondly, I don't quite understand why "Obviously there were no goals scored in the golden goal."
- 20/01/2009
- 11:35:54
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Sort of choppy - doesn't flow very well, and an industry is an "it", not a "they". Overall, though, it's a useful essay with substantial facts and figures.
- 20/01/2009
- 11:28:45
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